All right, here I go, ready to gush. The first line was amazing. Stunning in its beauty, really. The reference to black and white movies worked so well and really gave this piece that romantic, old timey feel. It set the mood right away and I was entranced from the beginning to the end.
Also, I really, really like Dominique in this. Her innocent sense of logic is so Luna-ish, but not grating in its off-beat nature. She reminds me of a flower child in this, or at least, a Romantic along the line of Keats.
The rose metaphor was also great. Love, after all, is beautiful like a rose, but it can be painful. In fact, I do think there was a slight undercurrent of love-struck torment in this fic. Teddy longs to catch Dominique, but she eludes him until the very last moment, until she can come to him on her own terms. Very nice!
Needless to say, I really loved this fic, Shiloh. Your writing came across as effortless and beautiful. Congrats on producing a lovely piece!
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Ooooh. I love your writing style :) Though I have to say I was a bit surprised at the end (I'm so used to Teddy/Victoire). Very very very nice :DAuthor's Response: Thank you :) I'm not a Teddy/Victoire fan, so you won't find it on my page! Report Review
I've never liked Dominique/Teddy. Yet I am absolutely in love with this piece.
I think this was my favorite part: “Then I will sleep, and it won’t matter anyway.”
He doesn’t know what she means, but he smiles anyway.Author's Response: Thank you for the review! It's okay that it's shorter than you intended :P Still lovely to get this!
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aw cutie! i enjoyed it. she kinda reminds me of lunaAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review :) Report Review
Awww! That was really cute!
The flow was a bit patchy in places (although, dumb me, I forgot to remember where) but on the whole really lovely! It has the whole poem-y, beauty that I really love and this just kinda spoke to me. It's the kind of love I want to find. (:
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