Your use of personification in the beginning paragraph stood out to me the most about this fic. They made the paragraph very poetic. I thought some of the words you used here were very descriptive and you presented us with clever and vivid images here, I was rather impressed.
I liked how vague the story was, I think it worked well with the tone of the story really well. You didn't go into to much detail about the why and the how, you just focused on the moment. I liked that. Overall, this was a quick and interesting read for me, so thank you!
xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I am super proud of this story! Report Review
I think you made a short moment absolutely beautiful! This sounds as if it could be a companion piece to another story. Hmmm maybe this would be incentive to write one? lol
Your wording and description really moved the piece on nicely and I was captivated all the way through.
slytherinAuthor's Response: Thanks! :) Maybe I will write another one! :p
This was a very good story :) I liked how you lead up to the point of them meeting and the little bit of dialogue was just enough to get the emotional point across.great job!Author's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
This was really good. I would love to read more. You have a great idea started I like the tenderness of it...Great job...Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Awesome story! Keep up the good work! You have awesome writing ability!Author's Response: Aww! Thank you so much! Report Review
this is really, really well written. but there are a few minor errors. just read through it again paying attention to the proper form of their and there.
Other than that, it is quite a good story that I really enjoyed. Keep up the good work :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have always had problems with that! I know its such a bad habit! Thanks for pointing it out! I know better I just get kinda careless! Thanks again! Report Review
It was short and sweet. I liked it.Author's Response: Thanks you so much! =) Report Review
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