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Review #1, by FallenAmaranth A Photo

16th June 2012:
Although I'm not into the Shipping(sorry) It's pretty epic. It's hard to review on characterisation, since it's an extremely unlikely relationship and so for it to work out both Harry and Snape would have to be non-canon characterisation.

I really liked it, it was really very sweet, what with all the memories, I think it worked really well. One thing I'm a little confused about is that in the picture, Ron and Hermione were getting married, yet in the Asylum Hermione was referred to as Hermione Granger.

It's very well written, although there was one part which I read through a few times in order to make sense of it.

"find somewhere to heal where you can't be bothered."

To make it flow a little easier and to avoid confusion, it would be better written:

"find somewhere to heal where you WON'T be bothered."

At first I thought Harry was insinuating that Snape was really lazy and couldn't be bothered to heal.

Other than that, it's really well written, and I think you did brilliantly!

--Fallen

Author's Response: Thank you for your input, I get what you're saying about the can't vs. won't, though I would not have seen it. Although the idea of Snape being too lazy to heal makes me chuckle a bit, though I am way out of canon I don't see Snape ever really being lazy.

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