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Review #1, by notreallyblonde44 Beauxbatons

28th January 2011:
Hello Drecklin! I'm notreallyblonde44 from the forums, a fellow Slytherin reviewing some stuff you know :P

This one-shot was well-written, short, sweet, and to the point. I enjoyed it! I thought this was a really creative one-shot. I clicked it because I've never seen much about the founding of Beauxbatons and I'm obsessed with the French, so I thought this was brimming with creativity and freshness. I love random when random snippets of JK's world are developed in fanfiction, it's always so fun to read about the differences and nuances of people's interpretations of events. I especially enjoyed the fact that the school that acclaims itself as being prim, proper, and snotty started out on such shaky grounds. I like that contrast a lot.

There were a few things that seemed odd to me:
'No one would assume Liesel Dubois, the French and German mutt who had hardly a penny to her name.' -this line seems unfinished. Assume could be replaces with suspect or after 'her name' a comma then was a killer.

"You wont find anything, it was all rotted," -What's rotten? A Candle? And a comma is missing in wont.

Salazar as her cousin...seemed too interconnected to be true, but I guess their pride is a family trait and there must be only a certain handful of magical people alive haha. So I think it's a stretch, but I'll give it the benefit out the doubt. Another thing I wanted to mention was that I had no clue what time period it was until Salazar was mentioned :/ I think the one-shot would be enhanced if there were more markers of the time and scenery thrown in.

Oh! And I like Pierre and how she persuaded him by using having him name the school -another nod to French pride, which I love. He was a solid periphery character too. So yeah, solid character and creative one-shot :) Yay for Beauxbatons!

Best,
nrb

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I don't know how to respond to such a long review other than I am definitely going to take a look back at this and fix up some of the points you mentioned. Very good points too ;D Thank you for the review again, it made me smile :) I appreciate it so much!

-Sarah


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Review #2, by Alisara Beauxbatons

27th September 2010:
Very interesting. I'd never thought about how magic was viewed before Hogwarts, and I love who you've set up as the founder of beauxbatons. I can completely imagine her as headmistress of such a strange school. a little more character development would have been nice, although I know it's pretty impossible with a one-shot.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! It is fairly hard to develop a character in a one-shot, but I will try harder if I edit this story :) Thank you for the wonderful review!

-Sarah


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Review #3, by Eridanus Beauxbatons

16th August 2010:
This was a really interesting piece, Sarah! You set up a completely creepy atmosphere from the beginning - definitely gave me the creeps xD. But my FAVOURITE bit definitely had to be the ending. Pierre Beaux and Beauxbatons! It was such a novel thing to do. I mean, I'm sure people have taken this view on it before, but I really just loved the way you handled it.

Great job, Sarah!

Author's Response: Jane! Thank you so much :D I am glad it creeped you out ;D And I am even more glad that you enjoyed that bit! Brilliant review

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Review #4, by lunarocks14 Beauxbatons

7th August 2010:
Wow, nice idea! Very original and good twist on events. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review :)

-Sarah


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