Aww, I love Ron, and more importantly, I love Ron/Hermione, so this story made me really sad. I did find it a little hard to believe that Ron didnít immediately recognize Hermione in the photographs. Even if they had broken up, I would think that they would still see each other from time to time. Plus, they were friends for so long, I doubt he would ever forget what she looked like.
Aside from that, I thought this was a really interesting idea for a story. You incorporated the lyrics pretty well, although they didnít completely match in places (which would be extremely hard to do with some of those lyrics). The details about Hermione that you put in were lovely and very true to her character: the worn library card, the mix of muggle and wizard money, the lack of receipts from beauty salons, the obsessive organization.
The feminist in me was a little offended by the part about how Oliverís job must pay well because Hermione had a lot of money in her wallet. Whoís to say that her job doesnít pay well? She one smart witch, and Iím sure sheís got a great job of her own. Granted, it was Ron thinking that and heís not always the most pc and progressive thinker.
The story is quite well written and is an interesting exploration of what could have happened with Ron and Hermioneís relationship, or any relationship for that matter. I liked the ending, when Ron got a sense of closure and a realization that he had moved on and would be ok without her. Lovely story.
SingularityAuthor's Response: I know this is true; however, I had to at least try to make the song work to the story, and this was the pairing I recieved from the challenge. It was quite possibly the most difficult song fic I've ever written.
And this author is a feminist as well! I meant no insult towards the women of the world, absolutley not; I was simply writing things the way Ron would think them, and he, of course, is un poco tactless. he's always been that way.
I had to throw in Oliver/Hermione in there. This was such an unrealistic one-shot that a little more lack of realness couldn't hurt, I didn't think. So there we go with that.
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Oh my gosh. I'm... I'm lost for words! This was so bittersweet, and so unexpected. Well, in all honesty I didn't know what to expect. That's the beauty of Ms. Spektor - her songs can be interpreted in so many different ways. I'm a bit of a Romione die-hard, but lately I've not been so much so this was lovely and refreshing. I really like how you kept the names of the kids, despite Oliver being the dad.
By the way, I love Oliver Wood. Always have, always will. *swoon* So yeah, brownie points for the inclusion of him!
I really felt how heart-wrenching it was for Ron to go through her wallet, you conveyed the emotions so realistically that I was incredibly moved by it all. I'm a crier, and I was moved to tears! So thank you, I guess, 'cause I love a good sob at a story! (",)
You managed to work really well with a slightly unorthodox pairing of song and ship and I really, really enjoyed reading it! Gah, I loved this - I really did (",)
Thank you so much!
PS "And one day, he would be as well." *dies* I love it, honestly.Author's Response: Seriously, you love it? Hahaha, that's awesome. :) I was worried about this one. Usually after I write something, I'm pretty confident that it at least *sounds* right. But I don't know, I was worried that my readers would find this a little... "what the hell are you doing, Paige?"
And I had to do the Oliver thing. I absolutely ah-dore him! I couldn't stop myself from marrying him to Hermione. I knew for my idea of the story to work, I had to pair her with some other bloke, preferably a bloke that Ron would know and envy, and since he's my favorite... well, there you are. :D
I'm really glad you liked it. (: Report Review
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