I mainly picked this one because Logan Lerman was on the banner. Turns out I made a good choice. I really like this story. It effectively tells all it needs too while still drawing you in. Good job! Now to go read that other story of yours that looked interesting!Author's Response: Thank you very much =) Report Review
awesome :) i loved itAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
I really loved this! I like Astoria and I enjoyed the way you portrayed her character. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
im reviewing this as part of the challenge you took part in.
i would like to say first of that i have placed this one shot third and will most defently look forward to reading the other chapters/oneshots of your choice.
i love the use of emotions in your story and very much enjoyed the fact that although these girls were in slytherin they are not completely heartless. i would have liked to have known a little bit more about the fling/relationship between astoria/zacharias. but i still think you covered their hurt or regretful feelings well.
i could see that the two sisters have a close bond as daphane obviously knew about the relationship and that astoria would be thinking about it. i thought this gave a very realistic feel to the story and to its characters. overall, a little bit more detail would have been nice but thought you covered the pairing brilliantly. well done.Author's Response: Thank you wooo!!! I will PM you the stories I want you to review!
I just edited this story and added more to the story Report Review
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