Rin, you are simply the best at one-shots by far no matter the length of them you always seem to fit it all into the plot. It's especially wondrous how you've managed to really delve into the character's sub-conscience here and explain what they're feeling at this precise moment, pulling the reader into their mind while these provoking thoughts are swirling around on the surface. Simply genius, hun. ^_^Author's Response: Oh, what a marvelous thing to say to someone! I'm beaming. :) Thank you so very much for saying something like that.
You're so kind. I really, really appreciate your comments and feedback, and I hope you have a sparkling day!
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Very wierd. But good, nice sheet tangling imagery.
Also am picturing his brain getting all rubbed raw...like sand in it? Was that deliberate??
Anyway, it's lovely, as always. : )
SophAuthor's Response: Thank you! :)
You are very, very lovely. Report Review
Wow, for being such a short piece (I noticed what challenge it was for, don't worry), it was jam packed with a lot of emotion and I think you explained the situation that Harry was in very well.
Not to mention the usual wordy Harry was quite quiet, yet I still felt this was very much in character. We don't know how he'd reach his demise so this is as good a way as any other.
Though, I imagine it must be quite irritating be tortured and pursued by one's mind constantly. I imagine it'd be quite overwhelming.
The imagery and emotion in this is gripping. I really enjoyed it, if you couldn't tell from my gushing. This was quite fabulous. It really was.
Not to mention I didn't pick up on any spelling or grammatical errors and that always makes me quite happy. So kudos there.
It also gives a piece that polished look and I know that I'm not the only one that appreciates that.
I think my favorite lines in the whole piece were the last ones: "He sinks onto the mattress. He sinks into oblivion, knowing that it is only a matter of time before the monster that is his plagued unconscious swallows him entirely."
It just sent a shiver down my spine. To know that you will one day be locked away in your own mind, that would be a knowledge that I would rather live without.
LindersAuthor's Response: My goodness! I'm really sorry I didn't respond to this sooner! It was... so unexpected. And lovely. :)
I really don't have much to say. Except to thank you from the deepest corners of my heart for such a kind and loving review. I can't thank you enough for the wonderful feedback and... just... wow. Thank you so much. I really... wow. Thank you.
Again, I really appreciate it. And now I realize I'm saying "really" a lot, so I should probably stop writing to keep myself from ranting for too long. But still, I'm so, so touched. Thank you so, so much. Again.
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