Well, first can I just say that I LOVE, LOVE the quote at the very beginning of your story. It is so true about light and is actually inspiring.
There were so many 'awe' moments in this story, I don't even know where to begin. I suppose it will be with the funny hair. :) I love your description of her red with black streaks. And love how you tied it in the middle of the story with her looking like a black and red statue, poor thing. And then of course bringing it back in the end. It was very sweet.
You described that first train ride really well. She was similar to Harry in that she hadn't known about magic or Hogwarts until it was time to leave, poor thing.
Your backstory for her was really amazing and I can see how she would live with pushing all of that hurt to the back and try to live with it somehow. The catalyst to letting it all out was heartbreaking as well... I mean 3 years is a long time. But in the end, it brought about her true feelings with Oliver, which needed to happen.
I liked how you incorporated the quote as seeing Oliver as her light in her darkness. It was so sweet in many ways.
It warms my heart that it was him that found her and I love how he reacted to Roger. Go, Oliver!
Truly, it was wonderful that he stuck by her while she healed and even wanted her to live with him. There was no reason for her to go 'home' anyway. Which, by the way... I think Cella (love her name) really fit in with Dumbledore's Hogwarts... meaning he always had a soft spot for the less fortunate truly needing a 'home'. (Tom, Harry, Cella, there are others, but I can't think of them at the moment).
Anyway, she fits right in and I can only imagine what happened to her mother who left magic and didn't want her to be a part of it. Perhaps she is a victim of the 1st war and also had post traumatic stress, etc. ;(
Anyway, great storyline, great depth, characters, and of course... Oliver Wood, who just warms my heart, especially after reading your story.
Ah, the beginnings of love... :)
Thank you for sharing your story.
Dark Whisper Report Review
What's with the mature rating? I thought this was barely pg-13... but that's just my opinion. :OAuthor's Response: It's to do with the mental breakdown and the family problems she has. ToS require it. But it's good to see peoples opinions! Report Review
good emotion and I liked the darkness of this story. Pretty sad no one found her for 3 days in the forest good grief! Luckily a great guy like Oliver is there for her. I liked your style too!Author's Response: Thanks! This is a little more emotional then some of my other stories so thank you. The forest is one huge place (that was my thinking). And yes, Oliver is awesome. ;)
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I can totally picture Oliver copying homework like this. It seems very in character for him, although I suppose that's inference since we don't know him terribly well, but he seems so focused on sport that it's really believable. It's funny though, I don't think I've seen anyone else write him that way. Well thought, there.
The further I got away from where this hurt had happened, it would go away, at least that was what I believed. But even as I got into the parts of the forest were no light filtered through the trees, it still hurt. It still pounded at my chest; it still felt as if my heart had left. - Beautifully written. I can really feel her emotions. The entire sequence that follows those lines is really well written, too. Loved the entire breakdown scene.
become a Hogwart's student - should be simply Hogwarts (no possessive needed)
The next sentence after that is a fragment, if you add it onto the previous sentence (just a comma instead of the fullstop) it will read more smoothly.
"Your hairs funny" I quietly teased - should be "Your hair's funny,"
Concrit: The section where Roger breaks up with her is a bit choppy. We haven't been introduced to their relationship previously, so this might be better with more lead-up. The ending with them turning to watch the clouds is a bit cheesy, but I can picture it in my head and it's very like a romantic movie.
Overall, very nicely written! I particularly like that it didn't turn into Oliver/OC. I think it would have been out of character for Cella to jump straight into it with her best friend after such a breakdown, and so props to you for not delving into cliche there.
momotwins/WTM Report Review
This is story is perfect. Its so cute. Please write more chapters!! I love this story and you had me squeal at the end of it because it awesome.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm sorry, but I'm pretty sure I won't be adding more chapters. But I'm not saying that there isn't a very very very slim (I mean it hadn't entered my head until you suggested it) od a sequel. A one shot seuel. Maybe.
Thanks for the squeel! :) Report Review
I liked this story, although I like all stories with Oliver Wood!
Keep up the great writing!
Rosie_PosieAuthor's Response: Hehehe, you love any story with Oliver, as do I. Thanks :) Report Review
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