Although I enjoyed the more romantic tendencies of this One-Shot one aspect that really grated on my nerves was your characterisation of Cedric. when you think about it, what he did to Katie was rather selfish and cruel. It suggested to me that he had a very sure opinion of himself and enjoyed the attention directed at him. Getting to the point you seemed to give off the impression that he didn't care about her or Cho and the kiss was purely for him. I'm sorry but I could never dream of Cedric acting this way - maybe the actor who plays him but not Cedric. From what I gathered he was always extraordinarily selfless and noble - a true Hufflepuff so you can understand why I feel as though you characterised him rather inaccurately.
Having said that I still thoroughly enjoyed the story line and the way you wrote this piece. One thing I noticed at least twice in that story was your impressive ability to convey emotion. Perhaps if you had replaced Cedric with a character more fitting to that role I would have liked this more.
Still a very good story though.
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Hi there, i just wanted to let you know that i really liked this story... i just found it and Katie and Cedric is my fav pair... i wish you would have continued it and made it into a big story!! =) hope you do that someday!!! Report Review
its an awesome story.i would really like it if you would continue it. Report Review
Woot woot! This is going in my favorites! xDAuthor's Response: :L Awwh! I'm glad you like it ^.^ Report Review
I really enjoyed your characterizations. Cedric is a wonderful mix of sweetness and arrogance. Your story is a great example of how one moment can be interpreted so differently by different people. It meant so much to Katie, but almost nothing to Cedric. Excellent job with the challenge. :)Author's Response: Awwh! Thank you so much! This review definately made my day :) I'm glad you liked the story ^.^ Report Review
I think this is really good. I agree with you about Cedric. I feel like messing with Katie's head is something he would do. I don't really know why, but I hate him. Anyway your characterisation of Oliver is perfect too. He would of course care about winning a quidditch match over Katie's health. Besides characterisation this was really romantic. It was also sad though. Katie must be angry seeing Cedric kiss Cho after he started a kiss with her. You made her feel like a real person to me, so great job. Keep it up! 10/10Author's Response: I'm glad you think so (:
Yeah - I have never liked him much myself either, tbh :/ He is just too...perfect :/ I didn't want to make him out to be a completely bad guy - but I wanted to make him a bit arrogant and vain.
I'm glad you liked my characterisation ^.^ I didn't find Oliver too hard to do, since it's a fact that Quidditch is his top priority. I was more worried about how to write out Katie's parts - I didn't know if she should feel really angry at Cedric, or just accept it, since she is quite a calm and cool character (:
I'm glad you enjoyed it ^.^ Report Review
OMG I really love the story I donít know how it possibly could be that you didnít get any reviews for it yet. Itís sweet, romantic and a bit heartbreaking. I felt so bad for Katie Bell when Cedric kissed her and she had found out he would never feel the same way and that to him she was only another one of his admirers. I never have seen anyone portray this side of Cedric before. Iít well known he was populair and handsome but nobody made him like you a bit arrogant though he was still nice and sweet.
CleopatraaAuthor's Response: Awwh! Thank you (: But hey - it has one review now ;)
Yeah...I tried to make it as realistic as possible. I mean, in the way that those kinds of things do happen to girls - and boys - out there :/ And it sucks.
No? Um...neither have I, to be honest :L I like Cedric, but I have always thought he was arrogant, and a bit vain xD
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