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Review #1, by Cygnet Swann Chapter 1

1st October 2013:
Excellent start. You have introduced the characters in a very quick yet detailed way. I can't wait to read more!

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Review #2, by Fanifical Chapter 4

23rd June 2010:
I honestly thought that was pretty good. So write more. I'd like to know what happens. Really though that was very good

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for that :]
I'm hoping to start the 5th chapter ASAP but at the moment am sort of stuck ;/ but it should be up as soon as I can get it done :]
Thanks for reading and enjoying it. means a lot :]
Kay~*


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Review #3, by couldyoureallyknow Chapter 4

23rd June 2010:
blooody amazing start to this james/lily story i would really like to see more soon! :)

Author's Response: Hey, I'm glad you like it and it actually means a lot :]
The whole story won't be focused on JUST James/Lily (mostly on Marauders really), but I promise there will be James/Lily moments and I'm hoping there will be quite a few :]

Kay*~


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Review #4, by Fan123 Chapter 2

2nd June 2010:
Great chapter. Really like how you are starting from first year and not when they are already friends. Do you have any ideas for the OC's yet? If not I have a few ideas.

Author's Response: Hello :]
Thanks for reading and the review.

Well I have 3 OC's in mind. Two of them being Lily's best friends and one Remus's cousin, but I would love to hear your ideas. :] Maybe I could use them as well.

Kay*~


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Review #5, by brightaddiction Chapter 1

26th May 2010:
Wow.
Props for including Peter; 3 boys sounded like he'd be missing but he was included and he was wonderful.

Um...you do good work, especially if this is your first story and you definitely have potential, though I do have a few suggestions.

Having clearly defined paragraphs is a must; most people have an extra line between paragraphs which would make your story much easier to read.

Second, having a clearly defined POV would make a shorter chapter like this one seem longer; having the chapter segmented between three different people makes it seem shorter and choppier than if you had focused solely on Peter or James.

Lastly, it is important to have an idea of where your story is headed. I know from experience that sometimes the inspiration to write will produce a couple of chapters with no clear vision or ending. Your writing is clear and well-presented but after reading this chapter I don't have any indication of what, if anything, will come next.

Alright, long review, and I'm sorry if it seems a little negative. I will definitely continue reading this story and I do hope you write more soon. It was refreshing to read something which actually included Peter (and in lieu of Sirius, of all people! ;P) and I hope you do well on your exams!

Author's Response: Hey,
Thanks for the review and the criticism and it was defo not negative :] This is, in fact, my first (real) story. I keep writing on and off but usually run out of ideas which just makes me give up ;D

I'm hoping that I can focus on Peter just as much as the other Marauders because other stories that I've read here pretty much focus on just the 3, James, Sirius and Remus. I always seem to feel a little bad for him even though I really do not particularly like him that much.

I'm hoping that the POV, probably after the 2nd chapter, would go into third person and become more clear. Definitely going to work on that for the 2nd chapter.

The clear plot is still a little issue that I'm trying to work out. I have an idea of where I would like this story to go, but its not clear so I defo need to work on that.

Okie, so thanks again and I will edit it up to make the paragraphs clearer.
Kay~*


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Review #6, by Little_My Chapter 1

25th May 2010:
This is pretty good, but it will be alot easier to read if you edit it with some paragraphs:) Some air always makes it easier. Other than that, the text is good, and I enjoyed it. Expecially the last part, so true :P
Anyway, good luck on your exams, they are killing me as well now... And of the writers block, just write as much as you can, even if it's just rubbish, and then eventually, you may come up with an solution. at least it works for me, so who knows, maybe for you as well (even though you'll hopefully not need it;))!

Author's Response: Heya,
First of all, thank you :] Means a lot to me to know that you enjoyed :]

The last part was a part that I enjoyed too ;D and I will edit up the paragraphs to make them clearer.

Thanks for that suggestion on the writers block, will have to try that, but I tend to give up for a long time when the block comes up ;/ but I will try to write it out even then ;D

Hope you're exams are over and you did good :] mine are done but thanks for the good luck :] did not do that bad I believe ;D

So thank you again,
Kay~*



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