Hey there! It's EnnaBellaPotter here (finally) with your promised review.
First of all, thank you so much for entering my Ultimate Passion Challenge! I truly appreicate the entry and all the time you spent writing it :) It's wonderful to feel as though I've inspired someone!
Second of all, I think this was a solidly written story. It's a great start with a good storyline! Not un-original or too fluffy, which is always a good thing haha!
It was little bit confusing with the POV switch-I would reccomend bolding "Albus' POV"- and sometimes grammar/punctuation was a wee bit shaky. A beta or a quick re-edit could definately fix all of this very easily.
Otherwise, I liked your Ultimate Passion Moment :) You really had the right idea and made it seem real.
Again, thank you so much for entering! I will PM you very soon with the results of the Ultimate Passion Challenge!
Best wishes for future stories,
~EnnaBellaPotterAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review and the wonderful challenge! Report Review
Haha! That was good of Albus, really clever! Good story, well done!Author's Response: Thanks. I always look to get positive reviews! They definitely keep me motivate. Report Review
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