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Review #1, by kandekisses I

5th December 2010:
*hides in shame*

I'm so sorry it took me this long to get to your story! I've just been so busy and all. But yes you can yell at me all you want for being so neglectful! I deserve it.

Hmm. Now onto the review!

Gosh, that was beautiful, from beginning to end. You wrote it so well! The description was perfect and it painted a clear picture in my head. I couldn't imagine going through something like that. You made me practically fall in love with Lysander.

&Lily was so understanding and compassionate. When she showed him the images I just about lost it. That was a beautiful moment. How did she do that? That was brilliant of you to put that in there.

The only thing I want to know is who was the torturer? I'm dying to find out! lol

All in all that was wonderful hun. One of my favorites from you!

Author's Response: thanks don't worry about the late reply it is understandable.
i am glad that you like my story of Lysander and Lily i thought they made a cute couple.
yeah everyone wants to know who the murderer is maybe i will do another part to the story where he is being tourtured. :)
Estelle X


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Review #2, by Ginny45 I

31st October 2010:
Hey RandomRed here from the forums.
I really like how your flow never changes even though your chapter has some deep contrasts.

Your characters are really well developed which is sometimes left out of a one shot, so the writer can focus on the plot. However it seems very well placed in this story.

The ending of this story, or should I say the last 400 words or so, is simple and perfect. The whole scene between Lily and Lysander is simplt amazing, you wrote it brilliantly and makes this story stand out.

Brilliant story 9/10.

RandomRed/Ginny45
xxx

Author's Response: wow thank you so much, thanks for taking your time and leaving a review i am glad you like it.
this is defiantly one of my favourite one shots thank you so much
Estelle X


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Review #3, by LilyMilly I

17th June 2010:
OOO, i loved this story!
it's so beautiful !


Author's Response: thank you i am glad you liked it :)

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Review #4, by Capella Black I

8th May 2010:
Ella here!

So, the first thing I'd like to say is that I really like the contrasting atmospheres you create here - first the story is brutally dark and cold, and then it becomes blissfully happy. Somehow, they manage to fit into the same chapter without jarring, and that's great.

I also really liked Lysander's character; he seemed believable, well developed, and it was enjoyable being inside his head. It might have been even better if Lily could have been equally developed, though I understand how hard that is to achieve from a first person perspective. Maybe extra dialogue or more internal description from Lysander? Either way, as it's predominantly about him, it isn't overly important, but it might help to deepen the reader's interest in them getting together.

Also, tiny thing, but you've spelt "too" as "to" on a number of occasions. I'm a pedant.

Aside from that though, this was a really enjoyable piece, which vividly captured the sense you were dealing with, and gave us a happy ending to boot! Thanks for requesting, and for sharing your writing!

Author's Response: wow thanks for the comment, it means a lot
Estelle XOX


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Review #5, by Ava Pearce I

18th April 2010:
Um wow. That was simply beautiful! The descriptions were really good, I could see the whole scene around me. And Lily... well I can obviously see how Lysander would fall in love with her. Her devotion to him was amazing. And you can definitely see the love between those two.
I love Lysanders little speech at the end, about She was beautiful on the inside and out, that was amazing.
What I want to know though, was who was the torturer?? ( though I have some ideas)
really, truly, an awesome story!
10/10
Ava xx

Author's Response: thanks Ava, i am glad that you liked my story.
Yes Lily is a sweetie. Lysanders speech was also beautiful i must admit.
anyway glad you like it and thank you for the brilliant review
Estelle XOX


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