i thought it was lovely but a bit..Im not sure what the word is. finished quickly? but maybe that was your intention - to make the story finish quickly to mirror Fleur's feelings? if not, I would have maybe focused on the moment she saw Bill talk to his dad, how he looked,what he was wearing, his smile and so on as picking him from everyone else at the party would have shown the love ;) i might have also added a memory or two with fleur and bill just to show how the love grew. but other than that i though it was great and Fleur's characterisation done well

Author's Response: I wrote this at least a year ago and at the time, I wrote much shorter fanfictions than I do now so that's why this is rather short and why it finishes so suddenly. Thank you for your ideas, I'll definitely take them into account :) Thank you!

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Wow, that was really good! I thought it was a great little piece of writing, and you know, I haven't read much with Fleur in it, but this was a nice change. I like how you wrote her, it was pretty perfectly in character. Your writing is great, I loved it all, and this was a very cute one-shot. I especially loved the part at the end with Bill smiling at her and the last sentence was great. A lot of stories I read just *end* at the end of the chapter, but you closed it off nicely. And I'm rambling a bit now... so all in all, great job! ;D

Keep writing! x flufff

Also... if you ever have a bit of spare time, could you maybe R&R my fanfic "Darkest Night"? I would love to know your thoughts on it... Thank you! x ;D

9/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review. I'm not really a Fleur reader myself but I thought it was worth me mixing it up and trying something a little different. I'm glad you liked it though.

Thank you so much! And I'll go read your fanfic within the next couple of days.

x Ely

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I think writing a few Hogwarts Era fics is great! You are an amazing writer =)! I could see this of happening in the books! I love Fleur/Bill it is so cute haha

10/10
Kattia

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love Fleur as a character!

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can i just say thankyou so much for the AWESOME reviews you left!
:D so anyway, YEAH for this! i loved it, it took me a while to remember who she was but then when you mentioned the triwizard cup, i was like "yer i remember!" so yer and then it just flowed. i loved these they had me in fits of laughter! -
she imagined herself tripping over her dress and then everyone laughing.
probably some prank they had planned.
hehe i havent read one on fleur before so i really enjoyed this!
XD 10/10

Author's Response: It's no problem, I love leaving random reviews! Haha, Yeah a lot of people think she was just some stuck-up French girl and I wanted to show everyone what I thought of her- which is basically that she's just like everyone else. You know, She worries about silly little things like tripping over and stuff. Well I'm very honoured to be your first! Thank you so much.

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Great job.It was Fleur's character as I never imagined it before- the girl behind the beauty and intensely french accent! I liked how she seems genuinely nervous about tripping down the aisle- it's something I would never expect from her because she always seemed so... confident. Very good job. I give you a ten out of ten and think you should definitely write some Hogwarts Era fiction.

Keep writing! (please!)

Nixie

Author's Response: First of all thank you so much for reviewing. A lot of people she her like that and I think behind the whole veela attitude there's a normal girl who's scared of things like that. Perhaps I'll write some more Hogwarts Era one-shots

x ely

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