Hi MissSpitfire/Estelle Black on here with a review for the challenge of mine you entered.
OH MY GOODNESS, That was not fair absolutly not FAIR, Bellatix is so EVIL i want to kill her *bit too far there* she was a evil . *naughty word*
OH poor Cissy Ari was so beautiful. i loved him. oh man.
i can't think of anything else to say except thank you for entering this challenge and writing this so i could read it.
I will tell you how you wentAuthor's Response: Hi! Thankyou for such a lovely review, yes the story is not fair, rather bittersweet. And yes Bellatrix is an evil *naughty word* lol
I truly loved the character of Ari and it was horrible for me to do that, so sorry! But thats how the plot played out, i can't deny my muse!
You're so very welcome, thankyou for putting the challenge up and subsequently giving me the inspiration to write this; a story i'm very proud of.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Can't wait to here how I went! :) Report Review
Oh my goodness, gracious me! Ava that was absolutely fantastic! Well you did say that you thought it was some of your best work, and I don't think I can disagree, I think it's amazing. you know how much you made me wait for this and on no level have you disappointed me!
Erm, I'm practically speechless by the beauty of it. Very, very, bittersweet but so wonderful with it.
My heart goes out to Narcissa with this one, I don't think anyone who read this couldn't feel heartbroken for her.
The twists with Bellatrix and Lucius were a stroke of genius, I wish I could write something that complex in such a short amount of time if I'm honest.
My BIG BUGGING question is what happened to Ari? I really hope that he didn't die, though I have a horrible feeling he did, and if he did by whom Ava?
You were right about the banner as well, it's absolutely perfect for the story. But everything about this story is perfect if I'm honest. I think you just dislodged a lot of fanfics from my top ten with this one!
I wish I could give it 10/10 but unfortunately it's only 10/10 because that's as high as the rating goes. PLEASE Ava write more like this! Now I'm off-with a hop, skip, and a jump- to read the rest of your fanfics!Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks a lot! I really got into this story, It just flowed, which was wonderful!
Yeah the story was bittersweet now that I look at it, I didn't have a certain emotion in mind when I went to write it but there you go.
Yes Bellatrix and Lucius, two coniving people, he was very much like Bellatrix and Narcissa always looked up to her sister (except for that scene in the story) so It's no wonder her and Lucius got together, they say we go for people that are similiar to our family members.
I'm sorry to say that Ari died, the explosion was on such a magnitude that it through narcissa against a window that shattered and then onto the platform, it definitely killed Ari. I mean it almost killed her!
Haha I apologise to any of the writers who's fanfics I dislodged from your top ten haha :D
Thankyou for leaving such a lovely review, it really made my day!!!
I am currently working on another one-shot at the moment that hopefully live up to this.
once again thankyou so much for the lovely and long review!
Love and Pygmy Puffs,
Ava xx Report Review
Wow! This is amazing!
I haven't got a single bad thing to say about this (except there are a FEW spelling/grammar errors which might be a good idea to fix up)
I'd recommend just getting a beta to read through that for you (:
This is honestly amazing. You really made me connect with Narcissa, and the situation she was in.
And the ending is brilliant. Pure awesomeness.
Great job! :DAuthor's Response: Wow! Thankyou for such an amazing review! Will definitely check out those spelling errors (got a lot of correcting to do!)
Thanks so much for reviewing :D Report Review
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