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Review #1, by purplepotter77 the long farewell of the hunger strike

16th July 2013:
The imagery here was breathtaking. Your writing flowed so well, just like poetry. It's so beautiful. Charlie/OC is a pairing I've only read once or twice before, but I think Charlie/Tonks or something could fit this because it doesn't work out in the end. The prose here is so lovely. The artist/canvas thing was such a nice concept to add to this, and I loved the last part of this about her finding the piece of glass and then moving up. I think it sort of summarizes/ties up their relationship quite nicely. All of your metaphors and similes were really fitting and the part with the dialogue was lovely.

Overall, this was a pleasure to read! Wonderful writing!

House Cup 2013,
Ravenclaw

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Review #2, by evans_4eva the long farewell of the hunger strike

1st May 2010:
I really like this - 10/10 for sure

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Review #3, by shenanigan the long farewell of the hunger strike

25th April 2010:
Molly, I really love this. It's so perfect and beautiful and subtle - and those words don't even come close to describing this right, but they're the only ones that come to mind. That last line at the end... And the bit of dialogue... Just... Wow.

What I like about this is that it isn't angst and heartbreak shoved into the reader's face. It's a description of a normal, realistic relationship. And yet you write it in such a way that makes it extraordinary.

Some parts confused me a little (the thirty pieces of Charlie?) but instead of being a negative thing, it actually made the story more special. The reader doesn't know everything, and that gives a sort of secrecy to the piece. Like we're only getting a fleeting glimpse, not the whole story. It makes it precious.

This piece is something you hold in your hands, but not too tight, because it's delicate and beautiful and you don't want to break it.

God, that last line still gets me. So, so beautiful, Molly.

xx
Zoey

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Review #4, by shadowycorner the long farewell of the hunger strike

11th April 2010:
I'm a little dumb, so basically this doesn't make much sense to me, but that's not a bad thing at all! I like pieces like this. So enchanting and yet elusive. they have this certain magic, which I adore, even though I don't exactly get it each time. i mean, at least I won't pretend I do.

But the phrases, imagery, poetic resonance in each sentence! It just gets me so and it makes me float in between the lines and have all these fascinating sensational feelings. I loved this piece. It was lovely. So wonderfully intricate and simple at the same time. i liked the metaphor with the rock. Genius.

I don't know what else to say. I mean, I'm rather speechless. It's simply exquisite and I'm glad I got to read it. :)

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Review #5, by Eridanus the long farewell of the hunger strike

30th March 2010:
Molly! ♥

Well, you asked if it made sense and to a simpleton like me it certainly doesn't :P. Not that that's a bad thing in any way! I was wondering throughout this whether it was Charlie/Clemmie or Charlie/Tonks, but I decided to go with Charlie/Tonks due to my complete adoration for it and the DOOMED nature of said relationship. It was all wonderful, and WHO the woman was really wasn't at all important, as it's truly a story about Charlie.

Your description and use of metaphor was truly stunning, as per usual. I really felt like I got right to the essence of Charlie and his steady, stoic, loyal nature. One of my favourite lines had to be;

He's always there, always ready. He is constant like a rock, yet rocks erode and she's never liked metaphors anyway.

That was probably because it managed to expand our knowledge of Charlie's character, whilst being beautiful and lyrical at the same time. It basically set a precedent for this piece which continued the whole way through.

Your flow was lovely, especially for something like this which I couldn't quite comprehend. It was the natural lull to the piece and the natural flow of it, descriptively and stylistically which really managed to capture my interest. However, there was one word in there that managed to disrupt the flow for me, and that word was 'gobble'. Bizarre sentence, but it is a bizarre word and I just felt like it was too clunky or awkward or plain odd for the piece. I had to take a double take at that point to establish what had been written, so I think replacing it with another word would be beneficial.

No glaring grammar, or I didn't spot any anyway, and if we're being honest that's the main thing :P. I absolutely adored this one-shot and it was all sorts of gorgeous adjectives which I am too stupid to think up.

Very nice work!

xxx

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Review #6, by RonsGirlFriday the long farewell of the hunger strike

30th March 2010:
I really envy the way you write when you write like this, Molly. Your prose is so lovely and evocative. And I've never been a huge Charlie fan, but then again, nobody really writes about him. I look forward to the sequel, which will hopefully be posted soon (?)

My favorite section was the part about the artist and canvas. Wonderful metaphor and imagery! I am so awed by your ability to writ this way. :-)

xoxo
Melanie

Author's Response: Because I am a woman of few words (:P), I'll just say a huge THANK YOU for your review and once again condemn you for your silliness. ILY!

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Review #7, by Jellyman the long farewell of the hunger strike

29th March 2010:
Ughhh. Excuse me while I melt in the corner, consumed by jealousy.

I cannot wait to see where you take this, it's holding so much promise because you kept it so very vague here. Like, it could go anywhere.

Love it, love it, love it.
10/10
xx

Author's Response: Do not melt! You are not cheese!

But I'm glad that you liked it so much because, to be honest, I really liked it too. And I usually don't like half of the stuff I like. But this? I love it, actually. :P

I love you, love you, LOVE YOU!

XOXOXO


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