pretty good except, hermione rolls her eyes and bites her lip too much. but over all pretty good. Report Review
Please learn how to spell. Interesting story so far though. Report Review
You really need to learn past, present and future tenses for your verbs. Ex: "so you can snuck out later" it's SNEAK not snuck. It's quite annoying really. Report Review
I Like, I Lust, I Love!!Please Update Soon!!Author's Response: hi thank you for your review. i'm back now so updating she happen as often as they can lily times Report Review
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