Aww, so sweet! It's my first story with Luna I read, and clearly, I couldn't wait more from it. It had everything an amazing read needed. Awesome job!Author's Response: thank you so much! her character proved very hard to write, so it means a lot to hear such positive feedback ♥ thank you for reviewing! Report Review
I loved this! I have never thought of Theodore and Luna together in any sense before. I loved how you tied their stories together before they even came together. I also looved how you changed their points of view, especially towards the end where each pov became shorter and shorter. Awesome work!Author's Response: It is a bizarre pairing, but I think I'd come across it in another story and, once I realised they could both see Thestrals, it was like a boom!epiphany moment and I just had to write something, haha. I'm really glad you liked it - thank you so much for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
I loved this. I loved how it changed from POV so often, how we saw Nott as a real character rather than a background Slytherin. And I always love a Luna story.Author's Response: Thank you! I must admit that I've always been intrigued by his character, and Luna is a favourite of mine. Glad you enjoyed it - thank you for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
Hmmm, I wonder what place you were with this story for that challenge. I is really good! You write so well! I like the places were the thoughts go from one person to another, you know what I mean? I hope so, but my English is not so well... :D Well, the last sentence is AGAIN great and fits the story so well, thought no better than in 'Before you were mine'. This is you second review! Still three to go!
-Xxx- sweetlovelygirlAuthor's Response: That's an encouraging start to a review :') I suppose that is, in my opinion, the best bit - the rest of it is a little clumsy and there are a few mistakes I'd like to iron out. Anyway, glad you liked it (:
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So, I kind of loved this. The description and detail really draws you in and the contrasting parallels of Luna and Nott's backstories was really interesting and beautifully done. I loved how you kept switching the POV back and forth and how they started out in their own separate 'worlds' with Luna wanting to remember and Nott wanting to forget, but ended up together, completing each other's thoughts. That was fantastic.
Also, I really appreciate that you showed another side to Luna. So often she is just the strange, free-spirited girl who is completely unaffected by everything. You portrayed her in a different, but extremely realistic way.Author's Response: Woah, that's nice! I was reading up on the lexicon on people who could see Thestrals and saw that Luna and Theodore's backgrounds mirror each others curiously: both have old, widowed fathers and have witnessed their mother's deaths. For two characters who are supposed to be opposites (Luna a 'good', carefree, breezy girl, Theodore this minor Slytherin guy affiliated with Death Eaters) they were kind of the same. I'm also very much for showing Slytherins in a good light ;)
And I've always thought that Luna had another side. Having very few friends and being the subject of bullying for quite some time has got to have had some affect. I'm glad I got this across ;)
Thanks very much for the lovely review! :D
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Sorry for the lateness in this review!
To be honest, I can see how this is an experiment. It is very raw. But please don't take that harshly, I think it adds to the charm of the story.
There are some grammar inperfections and I think some of your sentence structure needs work, but God, what a fabulous story.
I have never thought about Theodore and Luna. Not as a pairing, but just as them together, in one story. I quite like the idea of Draco and Luna because I love the contrast between his haunted character and her innocent one.
Theodore is perhaps more like Luna than we realise. We know so little about him, but the general consensus seems to be that he is not quite like the other Slytherins.
That line you used, where you say that he just wants a mother. That tore at my heart. Poor Theodore!
I loved your characterisations of the two. I really felt like it was spot on.
I think that you might have provided a little bit too much backstory, but the backstory was really interesting. It was lovely to see how you had interpreted their pasts and it really fit in with the story.
What I absolutely loved was the layout. The switching between the two characters. And at the end, it was like they were one character. I have never seen that before but it was very, very clever.
It may have been an experiment, but I hardly think it was a failed one. I really enjoyed it.
Hopefully you enjoyed the challenge and that you learnt a thing or two along the way!
Joop :]Author's Response: Whoops! I've always called myself a grammar nitpicker...blushing away here. I'll look over it and try and fix whatever's gone wrong!
Thank you so, so much for reviewing! I've had it up for what feels like ages without any reviews, so it's great to see something!
And wow, thanks. Reading it back, yes...the backstory is a tad extreme. I just didn't think i could leave Theodore without an explanation, because he's such a blank slate.
I'm also a lover of the good ol' Draco/Luna. I don't know whether I like them as a pairing or just as friends. I've written several things about them but I can't really get them to work. Whenever I make them a pairing, I think 'no-this would never happen.' Whenever I make them friends, I can't write it without at least one little spark. It's a conundrum! I compromised on my latest one. They're a pairing for a bit, and then it all goes in the shape of the pair. And he's seeing Pansy the whole time. And Luna's seeing Rolf. It's a tad confusing, yes...
Anyway, to cap this off, thank you. It's nice to see good reviews - you know, ones that point out things I could improve :) It was a good challenge, and I had fun writing this.
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