That was stunningly written :). I'll admit, I was sure I had the plot figured out, in that he falls in love, paints her, the end. The twist really blew me away, I didn't see it coming at all. It was very gothic-horror inspired and thus, incredibly unique. You did an amazing job capturing the male narrator's artistic soul in the first half of the story and in a way, it gives the reader a chance to understand why he did what he did. He wanted to keep her all to himself, and that she would never change/age and be his forever.
I was slightly confused though. So the spell he muttered trapped her soul in the painting and that's why she ended up dead?
Overall, it was an outstanding one-shot. 10/10!
~MistyAuthor's Response: Aw thankyou for such an amazing review! :D I'm really glad you liked it, this is one of my favourite pieces I've written!
The spell that he muttered is a spell which binds the victim, so he bound her up before he killed her - I was hoping that it would be like a way to describe what he did, but without explaining the graphic part (:
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This is a brilliant piece, one that I enjoyed more than anything else I've read recently, thought the morbid mood makes me reconsider the use of “enjoyed.” It really captured the romanticism of the time, and the complex feelings of a young boy. Who would have expected the ending?
The ability to set forth such a work in such a short format is incredible. This shows real talent. I would love to read more.Author's Response: Thankyou for the review and such nice comments, I'm glad you 'enjoyed' it. :P
...wow. I honestly don't know what to say. I would love to leave you a nice, long, fleshed out review, but I just can't. There are no errors in spelling or grammar I can see, nothing lacking in characterization at all, and even the way you switched POV's worked perfectly. The entire piece is simply a work of magic.
Thank you so much for joining in on the challenge, good luck with your future writing!Author's Response: Haha, thanks alot (:
This challenge really got me into, and I've already had ideas forming to start this as a collection of short stories, all based around this picture, I just need to put a little mroe thought into it first to see if it would work or not. Thanks again, I'm glad you liked it (: Report Review
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