This was absolutely HILARIOUS! The twins were my favorite characters in the series, and that liitle insight on the messrs really showed how similar they are to each other. NICE WORK!!! Report Review
SURPRISE! :D Instead of replying to your review right away, I decided to return the favour instead. :D Yes, I'm a dear, you don't need to say if anymore but thanks for thinking it anyway. ^-^
TO THE STORY - ...I was going to continue here but you caught me on Skype so I am going to rant now first. YOU JUST RUINED MY SURPRISE. :/
Oh, I forgot to mention that I am such a bad friend for never having stopped by your page before! I mean really, I've been here before, once, when I first heard about you in the forums - I went, "James? He's nothing compared to our Cal!" and then took a peek here and left.
But now I know your amazing-ness, I happened to glance back due to your review and then I saw this bunch of stories that looked sooo interesting so now I'm on a roll to read them all! :D (except next-gen, coz I hardly read next-gen. :P).
Okay, TO THE STORY - Hilarious, period. I may be a little confused though as to the part with the flashback. Was that just sort of like a mirror as an alternate universe kind of thingy? Also, the last part: ghostly marauders? :O When did that happen? Past? Present? In the map? Shutting themselves? :O
I love the dialogue, 'tis hard to create them. I find myself troubled by how to go about them myself. :D
And your characterisation - perfect. At least, really close. I love the Weasley twins, they're hilarious. The Marauders are mischievous too . :D :D :D :D - four laughs for them! x3
Your style is lighthearted and humorous - a real opposite to my dark angsty ones, but I guess I do need some of these now and again, else my sense of humour vanishes. -.-
And as for spelling and grammar - I did, proudly, find one little thing. Unless you meant Filch to saying "vandalising" as slang, then I believe it's "vandalising". But if you did, well there is one more. Over at the beginning when Fred tells George to run. If you read through it quickly, you wouldn't mind who's speaking as you can merely just imagine the twins arguing. But if you read through it carefully - it is odd that Fred is speaking first and then I assume George speaks next, and then Fred, and this tirade continues. But when it gets to "Fred!", of course we assume it has to be George speaking...and Fred spoke before him. It must be me but their roles seemed to be mixed somewhere in that chaos and I can't figure out when. -.-"
ALSO, you should make a full-on novel length story about the Marauders and Fred and George. Probably like a going back in time thing? Coupled together, they would be hilarious and I would love to read it. But if I remember correctly, you ALREADY have lots of WIPs going on. *stares at you until you get uncomfortable*. Yes, this is my way of nagging *coughintimidatingcough* you to write and finish your stories. :D
Also, I was so interested in reading this because then I get to take a peek at how a HPFF -man- thinks. Men's minds are confusing, but it indeed isn't that far-fetched from women's. Except well, more manly. Gah! It's hard to explain. And that probably didn't even make sense. -.-
Now I must bid thee goodbye so I can read that other story that caught my eye earlier. :D
~ Sevvy (I'm amazing, I know. ^^) Report Review
Brilliant! That was one of the funniest things I have EVER read! And you have managed to put two eras together perfectly. Really nice one-shot that just made me laugh, very well written as well.
Lizzfizz ;)Author's Response: Ahh, I'm glad you liked it! In truth I didn't really think it was that funny when I wrote it, but I seemed to have received a somewhat positive response from it, so - woo! Aha, I'm quite pleased you liked it, thanks a bunch for the review Ms Fizz! :D Report Review
OMG I LUV DIS STORY ITS SOOO SWEET!! XD I AM IN LUV WITH THE MARAUDERS AND THE WAY U PORTRAYED THEM AND FRED AND GEORGE WAS AWESOME :)Author's Response: Bahaha, I'm very glad you enjoyed it XD Thank you so much for the review, made my day! Report Review
heehee, that was funny! I LOLed! I LMAOed! I ROTFLed! I ROTLMAOOLed! (I'm not sure that last one's a real acronym...) Anyway, I'm exaggerating a bit ;) but I still liked it.Author's Response: Ahahahahah!!! XD Man, you make me laugh! Haha, definitely not sure if that's a real acronym. Well, I'm glad it made you laugh! (Or ROTLMAOOLed. Definitely a new one ;D) Thanks for another awesome review!! :D Report Review
wow. that is a nice take on how the twins got the map. i also really liked what my favorite boys (the marauders) did to the desk.Author's Response: Haha, thanks! :P It's just how I kind of imagines it... and yes, Filch isn't going to forget them very easily! Thanks so much for another awesome review! Report Review
I loved this! I found it so much fun to read and it's always nice to laugh. I think that I'm going to have to go read MTABA now... I loved your portrayl of Fred and George and the Marauders. This was really funny and I love the way you wrote it! Great job! :D ~KateAuthor's Response: Hello again! Haha, I'm glad you liked it! I was trying to make it funny, but I wasn't sure if anyone would actually like it.. ^_^' and YAY for reading MTABA! Thanks K, you rule! :D Report Review
Very cute. i liked it a lot. :)Author's Response: Thanks! :D Report Review
Hahaha this is really good =]Author's Response: Aw, cheers! Thanks for the review! Report Review
haha lovely (:
great story ;DAuthor's Response: Ah, I see you again maskedmuggle ;D Thanks, I'm so happy you liked it (: Thank you for the review! Report Review
Aw. That was so hilarious. Gosh. That was an awesome short story. I love it! I can't wait for more things that you write!!Author's Response: Aw cheers, 65ashben! I'm glad you loved it, and I do hope you check out my other stuff (yes, I'm shamelessly advertising here). And thank you SO MUCH for taking time to review :') Thanks for reading! Report Review
sweetness, this is really funnyAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing =D Thanks for reading! Report Review
Haha that was soo funny! I love how they're all soo similar, nice one-shot =)Author's Response: Thanks so much for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it - thanks for reading! Report Review
A hilarious missing moment! I loved the way you fit the flashback in, and the way the two incidents were mirrored. My favorite line was probably the running thing with the cane:
"Up his fat -"
And all the variations of it. xD
The voice of the map was so funny as well, especially when it kept calling them "the red-haired Weasels". I did feel bad for the Marauders in the end, when they lost the map. Poor guys. ;) They did have a good deal of nerve, though!
Oh, and your dialogue is superbly written between all of the characters.
Absolutely wonderful, a 10/10 for sure.Author's Response: Wow thanks so much! I had so much fun writing lines such as "Up his fat -" and so on, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading them too ;) I wasn't entirely sure how to get the voice of the map going, but it kind of came after a while (and they really are red-haired weasels, aren't they? Haha...) Thanks so much for all the uplifiting comments - honestly, you've made my week :D Thank you so much for taking the time to review and thanks for reading! Report Review
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