6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by jtz Winter

21st June 2015:
wow, that was so good! i really enjoyed it. where is the fourth chapter?

Author's Response: Chapter four is under construction. It's been so long since I started it, that it feels odd to write it now. But I promise this is one story I will finish. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Review #2, by jtz Spring

21st June 2015:
i absolutely loved this chapter! i hope one day you will spin it out into a whole novel or novella.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It's going to have a fourth chapter (and a long one at that), but that's it. Sorry to disappoint you and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Review #3, by UnluckyStar57 Spring

19th January 2015:
Hey! I'm here from the January BvB.

I really love this one! The intertwining of two different legends--Arthurian and Potterversian--is so cool. At first, I didn't think about the dying old man being Merlin, but I understood by the end of the first part. It's cool that he had a woman apprentice named Vivian!

Speaking of, I love how you played around with gender roles in this. Salazar is obviously such a traditionalist, refusing to look at Rowena's ankle, and she's pushing him, challenging him to let go of that. She knows that she has just as much power as him in the governing of the school, and she isn't going to let him forget it. Yes!

Awww, I'm sort of disappointed that this is the end of this one-shot. I expected this story to be a continuation of this initial idea, because I really want to find out the significance of the blonde boy and whether or not Salazar will end up approving of him.

Brilliant chapter!


Author's Response: All of the chapters are related, so it's not really a one-shot, exactly.

Glad you enjoyed it. I really think there are a lot of Arthurian themes in the books if you know where to look.

Especially glad that you enjoyed the characterizations of the Founders. I think I may actually have a handle on them.

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Review #4, by Veritaserum27 Spring

14th January 2015:
Hi there!

I'm here for the BvB review battle from the common room and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter! I've read a few founders era stories before, but none that addressed how Hogwarts started in such a deep and fascinating way. I love, love how you tied it into Arthurian legend and that makes so much sense to me. This is a great way to explain how the four founders came together to start the school. The only sad part is that I want to know more! I'm craving a novella, at the very least about these four and their relationships.

Your characterization is utterly amazing here. Within a very few words, the reader grows deeply attached to every single one of these four very different individuals, united for a common cause. I feel like you've showed rather than told us about their little quirks, deepest desires and defining characteristics. I'm almost sad to read the next chapter because I know it's set in a different era, but at the same time, I feel like it won't be a disappointment because you write so well!

Great job! I love your story!

♥ Beth

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the nice review. Yes, this story is extremely Arthurian, as that's the main point of it.

Glad you liked the characterizations of the Founders. I've always thought the 'Merlin was Slytherin' had to be Slytherin propaganda, since he would have way, way pre-dated Hogwarts, so I thought this would be a great way for the founders to decide on where to have a school.

Especially glad you liked it, since I thought this chapter was flat characterization-wise

Thanks again for the nice review.

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Review #5, by RonsGirlFriday Spring

9th April 2010:
So first of all, wow, this sounds like an awesome challenge. Leave it to Alopex to come up with something like this! As soon as I finish this review I think I'm going to zip over to eHPF and enter the challenge, if it's still going on.

I'm really impressed by this first chapter. You write Founders very well. It's an era I've always wanted to try, but I'm really nervous to do so. You brought life to it, and as far as I can tell, it's accurate as far as dialogue and so forth.

Nice job with their characterizations, too. I particularly liked Rowena - a little more girlish, flirtatious, mischievous, etc., than she's normally portrayed, but not to the point where it seems at odds with her House qualities and the fact that she's supposed to be brilliant and wise. Also, too, with Salazar - nobody ever thinks of him as being gentlemanly, really, but it adds something to his character while making perfect sense because of his traditional thinking.

I also really like the use of Arthurian legend - I could care less how true you are to it - it's the thought that counts! XD I'm anxious to see how you weave it into the remaining chapters and eras - because I assume you plan to do something with this idea of the heir of Arthur and the heir of Guinevere meeting again? I look forward to reading the rest to find out!

You have a very smooth and engaging style. It's a pleasure to read.


Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. It's been a while since I had a review for anything, so I appreciate it.

It's exactly about the heirs of Arthur and Guinevere. I'm going to surprise some people with who they are, though. :)

I was really trying to make Rowena seem sort of absent-minded, kind of like Luna, but with a sense of flirtation that Luna doesn't have. I'm glad you like my Founders. To my surprise I find that when I write the Founders, I almost always get a good response. Before I wrote a Founders piece at eHPF for Ginny's challenge, I never would have considered it, now I have a couple of bunnies for them.

I'm glad you liked my unusual characterisations for Salazar and Rowena. I think it's boring to have them the same all the time. There's a lot of sides to both of them.

Yes, Alopex is amazing. She's got a good head on her shoulders and I respect her quite a lot.

Thanks for the compliments, I'm blushing. I've had the Arthurian themed bunny in my head for a while now, but I never knew how to write it until Alopex's challenge.

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Review #6, by Pixileanin Spring

18th March 2010:
Oooh... I love Arthurian myth stories! I enjoyed this first installment and I'm looking forward to what you do with it next!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the nice review and I'm glad you enjoyed what you read.

Like I said in my Author's Note, I'm going to take quite a few liberties with the Arthurian myths.

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