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Review #1, by LindaSnape Part Two

13th March 2010:
She hadnít come back as a ghost, and Godric considered this a blessing and a curse at the same time. But the mere fact that some people did, the past mingling with the present, made it almost impossible for him to separate the two. And as such, she was forever living in his mind, a presence that was beyond physical -- it was something else entirely. And as beautiful as it was, it provided Godric with no way to escape the guilt that incessantly at his very being, threatening all that he had left in life. Ah, that had to be my favorite paragraph of this entire chapter. It was so beautiful and so heart wrenching at the same time.

I really enjoyed this chapter far more than the first. It was more poetic and the flow seemed a lot more natural to me. I also adored how you likened Godric to a weary traveler as his mind traverses both past and present.

The passionate love that he held for this muggle woman is admirable considering his father's beliefs on muggles. It is very sweet that he remembers her still.

I believe that you hit both Salzar and Godric's personalities spot on, especially from what little we know of them in the Canon. I'm impressed. I like how the characterization is developing.

Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm happy you liked that paragraph, and this chapter for that matter. I'm not quite sure where the story is going to go from here, though I suspect it will only be another chapter or two. I'll need to think on it for a while.

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Review #2, by LindaSnape Part One

13th March 2010:
I'm really quite surprised that no one's reviewed this yet! I absolutely adore Founder fics!

I love the mystery and intrigue that you've woven into the story thus far. It makes me wonder who this woman was that had captured Godric's heart and thoughts.

I like the guilt he feels, but also how he is trying to make amends. I also particularly enjoyed that he rationalizes that there was nothing he could do to stop her death and yet he still feels responsible. That seems very realistic to me.

The only thing that bothered me was there wasn't much characterization of either Godric or Salazar. Perhaps, that will develop as the story goes?

At any rate I didn't find any grammatical errors that were staring me in the face or any misspelled words. So kudos there.

It's a very interesting start. I can't wait to see where it progresses.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. I realise there wasn't a lot of characterization, but I was trying to focus more on the emotions than the character interactions. Glad the writing was alright though!

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