Holiday Review Extravaganza Event Two

Ah, I loved reading this. It was beautifully written, and I loved your descriptions. The feelings and emotions expressed in your narrative come off strongly, and it is all quite realistic.

I could really relate to James, especially the way he carved his "break-up", that sounds like something I'd do too, lol.

The piece altogether is very moving and has this melancholic feel that totally drew me in. Everything was just perfect in this brilliant story. It was so very powerful and deep. I loved reading it.

Great work! 10/10!

Cheers!
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Author's Response: Oh my gosh, thank you very much. I wrote that piece a long time ago. I am glad to know that it is still appreciated.

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Another excellent piece. I feel like you very accurately described Ontatio and its ethereal beauty. Although there is one small detail I would have to disagree with though...

I am not a native of Ontario, I actually live in the U.S. But when I travelled their with my ex-boyfriend to visit his family(he is a native), I didn't find many of the locals very welcoming. Granted that could be because I'm an American, and he told me they despise us. But he is also a jerk. And I'm definately not trying to offend anyone.

Regardless, this is still an excellent one-shot. Everything James' is feeling is so real, I kind of wish I was him, going back there to leave my mark and be rid of my ex forever. The carving into the tree, along with taking a piece home along with him to burn sounds quite realistic, and very much like something I myself would do.

Author's Response: I chuckled to myself reading this, it is very like an internal mono-log that one of my characters might have.
Any way I am glad that you liked me work and that you thought it was accurate especially as I have never been there

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Hey! So I'm a Canadian (no duh) and from Ontario... and I say you've done a pretty good job! You had the description of the province really down pat- I didn't know some of the information, like that it bordered five states for example. Learn something new every day! I have to say though, the description of the landscape kind of overtook the actual story, so that it bordered on sounding like a travel brochure. Maybe ease down a wee bit on the facts at the beginning. Other than that, it was a good piece... and an awesome shout out to ONTARIO!

Author's Response: ok, thanks for your advice, but i dont really intend to do anything with the stories, they are done and dusted. but thanks for it anyway. i've never been out of europe and so really its a complement that i can describe a place without even going there

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As always epic ! Luckily in my story James has the lovely Serena Malfoy who doesn't demand anything . Love always Serena x

Author's Response: i know but i had to get something in there that was emotional-ish

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Aww Hermionniny9!

I Love you gal! I'm so moved I literally have a HUGE lump in my throat. It's so moving and you described Ontario perfectly. AND the way you described it would make any person who lives in Ontario proud of living in such a beautiful place and make them proud to be Canadian! Especially now during the Paralympics (as you can see I am a huge 2010 Olympic fan and a die hard Canadian). And thanks so much for dedicating to me :) I’m so glad that I have you as one of my best friends!

Thanks a bunch
Rilla :D
U get a 10/10

Author's Response: *smiles like the Cheshire cat* thanks so much, I'm going to write one final one like that called Washington < no point for guessing where that one set. I think i might throw some twilight suggestions in, for example "i heard that there was a coven of vampire round here..." lol. it annoys me that book, yet i cant not read them. its really odd how i write about places i have never been. i think that Scotland will inspire me this summer. so you might be bombarded with "plz can you beta this"

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...Its not always cold. But I still liked it. 10/10

Author's Response: thanks, you can obviously tell that i havent been there, when i do i will write a better one (could be a long time) thanks. we hardly ever get snow over here, had a lot this year (well relatively not that much) it still caused the country to grind to a holt.
:D if you like that you should try Arizona (if you already havent)

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