This was great. Please update soon 9/10 : )Author's Response: I'm trying! Hopefully I'll more time to work on this over the summer. Report Review
Remus is so cute 9/10 : )Author's Response: haha aw thanks =)) Report Review
This was good. 9/10 : )Author's Response: Thank you. =) Report Review
Your portrayal of James is really really amazing. Reading that last part when he switches between aggressive and tender, then guilt-ridden and playful, suits him better than one would expect, but even in the books, he makes transformations in order to please those around him, such as Lily. Here, he's doing the same for Remus, hiding his guilt afterward so as not to hurt his friend.
I also loved the inclusions of significant Marauder moments in this chapter. That James got the Animagus spell down first doesn't surprise me - he's supposed to be cleverer and more powerful than even Sirius - though it was a bonus to see that Sirius and Peter were about equal in their ability to perfect the spell. Placing those two together in that way is interesting when I think about how they later use their Animagus forms to revenge against the other.
As always, your writing is stunning. Dialogue, descriptions, both perfect. It's fantastic to see that you updated this, and I'll be looking out for more. ^_^Author's Response: I'm extra proud of myself, now that I've got this wonderful stamp of approval. I haven't really worked with James before, I always focused on Remus and Sirius, so I'm so happy to hear that he's coming out all right. Thank you so much, friend. And interesting insight on Sirius and Peter's abilities! I hadn't really thought much about that.
I'm sorry the updates are so slow! I'm working at it. Report Review
ah, they're so sweet and confused. it's lovely. i'm glad you decided to continue with this! :D and i'm interested in how things shall play out. top notch job! :)Author's Response: Thank you very much! Unfortunately this story is a slower one, it's taking much longer to write than I had anticipated. I apologize for the wait, but I will continue. Report Review
okay, so i dont usually read slash fics...but a remus/james pairing? well, i just had to give that a try!Author's Response: It's definitely a pretty rare pairing! I hope you like it. =) Report Review
I've always been intrigued by James/Remus, but no one ever does it! So when I found this recommended by VioletGryfindor, I jumped on it. I read it a few weeks ago and really enjoyed it, and I just re-read it and experienced the same enjoyment. Haha I keep checking to see if it has any new chapters almost every day. The kiss was really great. It was very vivid in my head, as was the rest of the story. Sometimes writers make kisses really contrived or unrealistic, but this was so real it was jumping off the page. Please continue this! I beg you! Fantastic job.
P.S. I really like the name :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I'm excited by this feedback. Indeed, it's one of the rarer Marauder pairings, which is partially why I wanted to give it a go. I'm sorry it's taking so long to update. Unfortunately the last few weeks have been very busy for me, but the next chapter is finished, so it shouldn't be too much longer. Thanks again for this great review, and I hope you like what's to come! Report Review
Wow, that ending was very intense, even more than the chase, as the emotions were very well-portrayed and I could hear the characters yelling at one another. There was a lot to this whole chapter, though, which made it wonderful to read.
I don't read many Marauder stories anymore, but I was struck by how perfectly canon your story is. It seems strange to say that with the ship you're using, but the details of the school, the Marauder's friendship, the making of the map, they're all so perfect. Like the painting with the Siamese Cats, or how Mrs. Norris is just a kitten. Very few writers would think to include things like that, and seeing them here just makes this story that much more special.
You actually surprised me with the kiss because, while I was expecting it, I expected it to take place sooner, maybe when they first were in the secret passage, while they were laughing. It was better, though, to have it where you did because it was just as surprising for me as it was for Remus. There was already tension between them during that first part in the passage, but I liked how it was, instead, a moment of humour and equanimity between them that sparked the kiss. It felt more naturally-placed that way, better suiting both characters.
I could go on squeeing the characterisation and the perfectly clear and flawless writing, but then this review would be much too long. :P So, I'll just say that this was fantastic and I want to read more. Brilliant work! ^_^Author's Response: ♥! Thank you so much, Susan! I'm really excited to see your response; I've been a little nervous, as you know. This made me smile so much! Thanks again. Hope you like what's to come. =))) Report Review
I love your Marauders. They are so perfect. And this story shows off how well you know the four. You leave Peter in, making him exactly what he was. But James... wow. Perfect. And your Remus and Sirius... doubly perfect. This is going to be a great story. I hope others realize just how good this is going to be.Author's Response: Aww, you didn't have to write this. =))) Thanks so much, dear. ♥ I hope you like where it's headed - angst angst angsttt. =) Report Review
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