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Review #1, by ecogirl I

7th March 2010:
First off, I'm so glad to see something with Crouch. He's such an underestimated and underused (one of the many) character.

Love the mentions of Percy. It was short, but right on spot.

The entire piece is so full of emotion. Not sure if that's the right word for it, but it's all I can think of right now. Even the time setting, before the World Cup, is powerful. All of the despair the Barty has gone through, all the bad he has done, and it's only going to get worse. He seems to know that too, even if he doesn't admit it.

What is the time span on this? Just a few moments, I think. It's amazing to cram so much content into seven paragraphs of less than an hour, and have it work and flow as it does. I've seen (and tried to write) attempts at displaying just a moment in time, but none I can remember off the top of my head work so well as this. (Of course, I've been away for a long time, so my memory of what I've read is abysmal).

I commend you on this piece. At first I had though it was about Barty Jr., and was slightly disappointed to see that it wasn't. Which just shows how things shouldn't be judged on first impressions.

Off to read some more of your work after this, good luck with your writing!

grammar/spelling:
The weather had natural as of late [just slightly confused on the wording]

Author's Response: To be honest, I never thought of writing anything about Crouch before, but it hit me on a sudden whim and I decided to go with it.

Ha ha, thanks. Yes, I thought I'd include him briefly as he's not my favorite Weasley but it couldn't be a Crouch piece without his over eager employee.

Yes, he is well aware that things are going to get worse even if he doesn't want to admit it or rather won't, he is very well aware of this fact. I think that some men are perceptive, and I definitely think he would be one of the more intuitive ones, living with someone as horrid as his son.

Yes, the span of this piece doesn't last too entirely long. Your guess would be correct. I'm assuming that it was only a few moments, but a trying few moments for Mr. Crouch. Thank you, I'm pleased that you find it works so well.

Why thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Although, I think I can understand why you felt that way. What with the Sr. Crouch being such a boring figure, I figured to give him the traumatic spin to liven up his character, a bit. To make him more human so to speak.

Thank you! I hope you enjoy what you find!

grammar/spelling:
Ah, thanks for pointing that out. Must have lost my train of thought for a moment. I fixed that. :]


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