good story so far!! im looking forward to seeing where this goes, update again soon! =]Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really happy to see that you're enjoying the story so far and hopefully I can get another chapter up soon! Thanks for reading and reviewing! :) Report Review
ahahah. so funny. :) james=lovee. and myrtle is such a creep. eck. this was a funny chapter and I'm excited to read more!
p.s. sorry for the mega short review, I usually leave way longer ones, but I'm just way too tired right now. maybe ill leave you another review tomorrow on an earlier chapter to make up for it. Report Review
Yay! Finally an update! (: I loved it!! SO good! And really funny. :D Report Review
Well you did a very good job on this chapter and, although Minerva seems a touch uncharacteristic, it was rather accurate to descriptions.
Well done!Author's Response: I never realised that Minerva was a little OOC, but I guess it's just because this was one of those stories that I just quickly started because the queue was incredibly short one day, and didn't really think about what or how I was writing. But I'm glad that you enjoyed the story so far. Thanks for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
when will your next update be? :}Author's Response: I don't know. I've written half of the next chapter, but the rest just hasn't come to me yet, sorry :/ Report Review
Maja from the HPFF forums with your (*gulp* LONG OVERDUE) review. I'm so so sorry it's taken me so long to get around to this, but I haven't been feeling in a reading mood AT ALL and I didn't want to take that out on anyone's chapters. :( Sorry!
So. This first chapter is nice; well written, grammatically correct and generally error free. You set the character's personality up quickly, but still manage to show, not tell, always a sign that Mary Sue's shouldn't result. :D Which is a Good Thing.
Marlene is an interesting character. Sarcastic and a teensy bit nasty, but I think I like her. (Oh, who am I kidding? Those are the characters I love!)
The whole 'Randy' business is ridiculous and funny. Johnathan seems like a cool character, though I have to say I've never seen your spelling of his name before. Generally it's Jonathan, without the h, because John isn't actually short for Johnathan, it's a name by itself. Jonathan CAN be shortened to Jon/John, but it doesn't go the other way. [/wibble]
You set up a good scene. Good job, and good luck with your future writing!
MxAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and honestly the wait was fine. I'm really happy to hear that Marlene isn't (or, shouldn't) result in a Mary Sue character, and that you like her overall. As for the spelling of her brother's name, I think I thought about it a few times, but went with the Johnathan spelling. Now that I think about it, it doesn't look like it would be the right spelling after all...
Anyway, thanks for the lovely review! :) Report Review
this story makes me smile :)Author's Response: That's good to hear! Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
Good chapter! Update soon! Oh and what does "cor" mean? hahaAuthor's Response: As I understood it, it's just an interjection. Like if one were to say "Man, that was terrible." it would be "Cor, that was terrible." in Brit-speak, more or less. I hope that makes sense. Well, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
Well I can't comment on your use of British terms as I'm American as well but good chapter. Keep it up(:Author's Response: That's alright, but I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Thank you for reviewing anyway! :) Report Review
Okay, so I'm British and seeing as you asked about the slang and stuff...
I totally love the story and everything, but nobody ever says "Cor Blimey" or "Crikey" unless they're a Cockney. We tend to stick to stuff like "Bloody hell" and if it's really bad, "Fucking hell". We do tend to use "Blimey" but only very rarely and only in certain situations :)
But I really do love your story :)
9/10 and keep writing!!!Author's Response: Thank you for that. I just used a British dictionary of words, and I guess all the different types of slang were mixed in ^_^ Thanks for the tip. I'm glad you liked the chapter and the story so far! Thanks for the review :) Report Review
i like this! please update soon. this is brilliantly written. i love the carefree way they all are!Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Thanks for the lovely review! The next chapter is in progress :) Report Review
Haha i luv this! I cant for for chappie 5. Luv u and ur story!
~Erinn xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! :) Report Review
I really like it but I'm unsure as to who in this story is a particular love interest to her? Either way I love it but wish the chapters were longer lol :pAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you're enjoying it :) Report Review
LOVE THE STORY!!! Update soon, PLEASE??Author's Response: I'm glad that you're enjoying it. The next chapter is currently in progress. Thanks for reviewing :) Report Review
I L.O.V.E. :3
*sends hugs and kisses to the author*
Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is in progress :) Report Review
I can not wait 4 more! :D I Luv this!
~Erinn xxAuthor's Response: Thank you for reviewing :) I'm glad you're enjoying it! Report Review
Peter is rather funny in this chapter. This story continues to impress me by it's believability. Keep it up(:Author's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
ah some of my favorite things, skins and the marauders! this is fantastic, i can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is in progress and should be up within the next few days :) Report Review
I LOVE SKINS! Your banner got me, it's an amazingly interesting story you have, you know. If you like Effy, she is in a new movie in the UK and in a song video called when the sky falls, IT'S AWESOME!! I'm frilled to sea how quick you have gotten another chapter up. Bye for now x.Author's Response: I love Skins too ^^,
I'll make sure to check that out, but thank you for reading and reviewing and enjoying the story :) Thanks for the lovely review! Report Review
Certainly not complete rubbish. I usually get really sick of the stories where some girl comes back to Hogwarts after being gone for awhile, but for some reason, this story works. It's good, keep on writing(:Author's Response: I'm really happy to hear that you think that! I usually try and stay away from cliche's, so thank you for giving my story a chance :) And thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I Love Marlene! This Story Sounds Great Already! Please Update Soon!Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is in progress :) Report Review
Hey, it's Happy_Hexer from the forums.
This definately well written, although your main character seems overly confident and oozing with sarcasm, although I think I like it. That just means she's going to cause complete chaos, right?
I'm looking forward to when she gets to Hogwarts.
Don't hesitate to request another review when you upload the next chapter, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter. The lack of spelling and punctuation problems make it a dream to read (especially since I'm not good at spotting spelling and punctuation problems =P)
9/10Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) I'll be sure to rerequest as soon as the next chapter is validated! Report Review
Seems interesting so far, keep it upAuthor's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Good start. Keep going.Author's Response: Thank you! (: Report Review
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