Its beautyful! You've left me speachless...


Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D

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Hi, it's JaneTwilight from the forums here with your review!

The unhealthy relationship that I gave you involved a person who was in love with somebody else, but the person they loved had a dark sceret and they didn't know how to handle the situation.

I have to say that I think you handled that relationship very well throughout the entire story. I like the way you wrote everthing in third person as well, it added to the interest in the atmosphere.

I think I've already mentioned how much I admire your writing style, it was as brilliant as ever in this one shot. I couldn't spot any grammar or spelling mistakes and you used a great range of vocabulary in your descriptions.

The characterization was very good, I couldn't pick up the names of the characters, but I really admired the loyalty that the male showed towards the female, despite the fcat she was a thief.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, from what I've read so far, this is the best in all the challenge entries, the deadline is in six days so you should find ut some time around then :)

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really had some serious doubt about this story, to be honest. I felt as though I had drifted away from the prompt you had given me, and I'm really, truly glad to hear that I hadn't.

I wanted something different for the story, that yes, the relationship was unhealthy...but yet, not? If that makes any sense at all. I also wanted the protagonist to be male, instead of female. Ah, that poor guy.

Your compliments are so wonderful. They've truly made my weekend. Thank you so much for the praise and for such a wonderful challenge!

♥

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Baha. I have to admit, I came across this story while lurking and I clicked it because I thought the banner was pretty XD.

But. omgomgomogmgomgomgomgomgomg. askdjfa;lkjdf;lakjdf. *fangirlfangirlfangirl* This was...indescribable. Fantastic. Amazing.

I love how the muggle was such a pushover, having a sort of twisted hero complex, being drawn in by the (ahem, excuse my pun) wicked witch.

The MuggleMan just sits back and relaxes, while the witch goes on with her wicked deeds, having this quasi-relationship that both befuddles and intrigues me. That innocent quote about her wanting the star=brilliance.

When he came home to find her gone and an empty apartment, I thought I was going to cry. And when they Obliviated him. Oh sweet Circe.

It was tragic.

IT TOTALLY MAKES SENSE. Ha, see, I knew randomness was awesome!

Loff you. :D

Author's Response: MICHELLE. ♥

Firstly, I LOFF YOU. Secondly, THANK YOU FOR SUCH A DELICIOUS REVIEW. I MEAN. SERIOUSLY. DELICIOUS. omnomnomnomnom.

I'M GLAD THIS ONE-SHOT MAKES SENSE TO YOU, BECAUSE HONESTLY, I WAS NOT IN MY RIGHT MIND WHEN I WROTE IT. (when am I ever in my right mind, though?)

Poor, pushover Muggle boy with a twisted hero-complex, indeed. Falling for a witch was not a smart thing to do. Especially one as wicked as her. :P

THANKEE, MICHELLE. BABYDOLL, YOU'RE A STAR. ♥ *glomp*

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oh my gosh, this was absolutely amazing. (:
their relationship was really believable, and it felt really real. :D
the paragraph that started with 'a week past' made me tear up :'(
10/10!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked it and that you thought it was believable! I didn't want people to be annoyed because they thought it was too unrealistic -- that someone would never pursue a relationship with a person who had crawled through their window. I guess it just shows you that relationships can happen at the most spontaneous of times and that they can remain together, if both the parties choose to be together. :)

Thank you so much for stopping by and taking the time to read and leave a review. It really means a lot to me. ♥

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