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Review #1, by MimbleyWimbley The Miracle of Birth

15th November 2011:
Short and sweet... :)

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Review #2, by JuliAnne The Miracle of Birth

11th March 2010:
Hospitals generally don't close.

"witches that was" should be were.

"The doctor wheeled her out of there, and that was the last he saw of his wife" this is very strongly worded. He does, in fact, see her again :)

Rose is not the feminine version of Ron.

There is almost zero scenic description.

The format of the dialogue is off. You might have something like: "Ice cream is good," said JuliAnne, or "I LOVE CHOCOLATE CHIP COOKIE DOUGH ICE CREAM!" shouted JuliAnne. The punctuation before the end of the quote turns into a comma if it should have been a period (which you seem to grasp) and doesn't change for quesiton or exclamation or marks (which you also seem to know), but the word that comes after the quotes is still part of the sentence and is therefore not capitalized unless it is a proper noun, such as a name as in "I wish I had some chocolate chip cookie dough ice cream," JuliAnne whined.

But it was a very cute story which I otherwise enjoyed and a good concept :)

Author's Response: It was sort of a last minute thing. I guess I'll edit this piece one of these days, since I wrote it when I was younger... probably around the age of 13 or 12. Apologizes for the bad grammar... I'm planning to edit this once I have time.

Thank you for your input, I appreciate it! :)

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