GAH. Your writing is making my small little Andie/Ted fic seem very, very minuscule. ;) Am very jealous, and would, naturally, like to see more. Because I'm obviously some sort of masochist. XD
Realize you haven't updated this in about forever in fanfiction terms, but would my pretty, PRETTY please help you change your mind? *bats eyes adorably* PRETTY PLEASE? Report Review
Argh what a fantastic chapter! This is my favourite so far without a doubt! This really does show how different she is without Ted in her life, how one choice to take a risk could affect everything. You should be super proud of this story, Jo, it's a treasure. Looking forward to the update! Report Review
This just keeps getting better, and repercussions keep getting more different. This really highlights how small changes can make a huge amount of difference to the storyline and on how you characterise Andromeda. FASCINATING and expertly done. Reading on.Author's Response: It's funny how a single relationship - almost always a romantic one - seeps into every aspect of your life and changes things it even shouldn't! The whole love/lovers changing each other has always fascinated me, and I am very glad you are enjoying this my dear!
Thankyou as always for your wonderful
support - it's been an honour and a joy to be tucked under your capable wing for so long! Report Review
Oh this is definitely taking an interesting turn, it's getting a little darker and I love it. The two repercussions are becoming more distinct with every chapter and I love how I can't guess where this is going. Continuing to read on, you're in danger of having your words snuggled to death. LOVE.Author's Response: Sometimes these morbid little freak moment write themselves and worry me ;P
The repercussions of her choice are definitely going to show: it wasn't just a single decision but a fundamental one she made, but it's very good to hear you can't guess.
LOVE.YOU. Report Review
Ah and the significance of the title has just clicked into place! This is a marvellous read if only because I'm enjoying seeing how clever your writing is. Have I mentioned that this is beautiful? Because it is, very much so and your words are utterly edible. The offer to steal them still stands; can I?Author's Response: You have, and it means the world, but I still can't let you have my words. Will my undying affection do? Report Review
I was wondering how you were going to continue the technique, I thought maybe you'd write the two universes continuing from the point where she made the first decision, but this is very interesting indeed. (I have not seen Sliding Doors, but Rachel says I must and so I'll endeavour to watch it) And it's all carried by your enviable style and execution. Can I just run off with your words, please? I think we'll be very happy together... Please?Author's Response: You most certainly must: it's one of my favourite movies of all time!
Someone has certainly run off my writing, but I know you wouldn't do that to me.. would you?
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Besides, your own is plenty magical, don't be greedy!
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Oh my goodness, this is so clever! I've never read anything like this before, you continue to impress! I was busy admiring your gorgeous descriptions and then I read on and suddenly the story is flipped and there are two paths. And we see them both! I can't wait to see where this is going, it's such a work of art. A masterpiece!Author's Response: Stole it off a movie, not mine :(
It is SO much fun though, the whole 'what could have been' has always had an unhealthy fascination for me. Far, far from a masterpiece, but it's lovely of you to say so and ILY Report Review
Your descriptions are to DIE for! Every sentence is a work of art and your word choice is absolutely stunning. How do you write so amazingly and so consistently? You never cease to impress me. Reading on.Author's Response: Oh shush you, your own descriptions are a by word! (as you can tell, I'm rubbish at handling compliments)
But honestly I'm not even capable of responding to this, so I will simply say: thankyou so, so very much my dear. I can't tell you what your support means to me!
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wow! this is amazing. So beautifully written and powerful. I love the symmetry in each chapter, realising that she must grow up, "she is a Black and she is unstoppable" etc. I also love how she is the same Andromeda in each part, she does not always stop them beating Ted Tonks because she loves him, but because it's the right thing to do. This is my new favorite fic x Report Review
To repeat what I've said in my previous review, I LOVE the contrast going on. I love how she's got this dangerous, wayward life with Ted and then this blissful, spoiled life with the suitor, yet she's happier in the first than in the second. I love Ted's character, and this defiant side to Andromeda. Poor girl, she'll be blasted off the tapestry in a year or two!
It's really interesting to read these two parallel stories running in - forgive me being a SciFi geek for a second - what reads like two parallel universes. I also like the order you've put them in, because each chapter sort of starts on a high and ends with a low, because even though you can see she's having a happier time being accepted by her family, she'd be much happier with Ted. Andromeda #1 made a wise choice in getting that train. Andromeda #2 - well, I think the only reason that I pity her is that I can see the contrast between the two sections. After all, she doesn't know what might have happened had she got the train that night, and she doesn't know what she's missing. If that made any sense whatsoever!
I love this story. It's a really smashing idea. Report Review
He took her to a party! Gosh, I love this Ted already. He's so...ooh, he's such a rebel! And now he's drawing Andromeda into the little fold of rebels, and they'll all rebel together and be glorious little rebels and such. I like his character a lot.
The contrast is working superbly well, especially seeing as the two sections are almost parallel in terms of writing. I wonder who the respectable boy is? It's interesting that you haven't named him so far, or, if you have, it's interesting that I'm being an idiot. It kind of epitomises how the life with Ted is the one that's meant to be.
In short, I love this story. Report Review
The choices! I remember watching Sliding Doors, so I presume that her whole life hangs on whether she'll get on this train or not, non? Well, I'll continue and see.
I love that first description about being caught in a web. Merlin, what fantastic imagery you've got going on there. Report Review
REVIEW CHALLENGE #12.
It is short, but because each part is following a different tangent, it works. If they were too long then I'd lose track of each part of the story, so I really like how it is.
I really enjoy reading this. It's so unique and I've never read anything that comes close to it. Wow. It's both interesting to see how she got to be with Teddy and what other option she could've had. And I like your idea of what drove her to a Muggle-born :)
10/10Author's Response: I have quite a short attention span for poetic prose, so this is as much to keep me from wandering off as anything else XD
I'm so glad you are enjoying this, it was a bit random and hasn't got quite as much of a following as my other stories, but those of you who have taken it one are simply lovely.
Exploring what could have been has always fascinated me, and Tedromeda is such an epic, epic love story.
Thanks again for the reviews! Report Review
Review Challenge #11.
Wow. That was unexpected. I didn't see that you'd write BOTH scenario's, but this certainly is turning out to be interesting. This is so... wow. I've read seperate fics that seperately explore the different options but never something that does it together and contrasts them in one fic. -is in awe-
I still can't get over that. It's so unique. The writing is great too, and the flow is good despite each part beng short. I shall eagerly get onto the NEXT chapter now too ^.^
9/10Author's Response: Yes, it's a bit harder than I thought it would be, but I do want to explore what would have happened either way :) Originally, it was a super long oneshot, but that proved too complicated structurally. .
You're fat too kind, but I do appreciate it! Thanks for the wonderful reviews! Report Review
Review Challenge #10.
This is so poetic. That first paragraph is so beautiful. The cliffhanger at the end I don't like so much, and I can't even GUESS what she's going to do, which is unusual.
I can't say much else apart from how much I like this, considering it's short and just the beginning. I can't wait to read on.
9/10Author's Response: Hi! Was there a review comp I missed? Anyway thankyou so much for the lovely reviews! I'm glad you liked it despite the length, and hope the rest continues to be likable! Report Review
Jo! What are you doing? You crazy! This was great but totally unexpected. The reflection between the parallel storylines is becoming sharply similar. There were few words changed from the first to the second. This sudden change in flow, has surprised me as you can tell. We are rocketing into conflict on both fronts AND we are learning that Andromeda is Andromeda in both timelines. I love this story and I am very honored to have a chapter of it dedicated to me. -blushes and doesn't know what to say- Well Done!Author's Response: Jake! I am a bit mad, tis true, tis true. And you and Annie have been absolute legends with this story, a dedication is really the least I can do!
I didn't want to go the easy route and have wildly different Andromeda's - she is still, atm, the sam girl, just in different situations!
Thanks for the review! Report Review
A solid lackadaisical chapter. The conflict in the first part is great if underplayed. The second timeline is brilliantly underscored with a deeper conflict that involves rivalries. Indeed enemies are kept closer for the Blacks. I really like the bit of repetition/reflection at the end of the piece. I'd be a fool if I didn't suspect that C'est la vie means Such is life in French. Enlighten me if I am an even greater fool for revealing my ignorance when it comes to forgein languages. The balance between the two timelines is nothing short of incredible. Neither one overshadows the other. Thanks for continuing to impress me. I really do admire your skill. Well done!Author's Response: Mmmm not sure if that was the vibe I was going for, but glad you liked it!
Paralleling is necessary and hopefully not boring :) and you are quite correct, C'est la vie does mean such is life, that was my little pun with the french/english contrast!
Jake, you are FAR too liberal with your praise. I honestly am not that skilled, but thankyou for saying so! Appreciate it muchly! Report Review
So she isn't so satisfied with her life? (In the second part.) Of course she wouldn't be, after seeing how tied down she (still) is, she'd start to dream of being free.
But now are things starting to go in the same direction? Oy, these alternate universes, as much as I love them, are beginning to mess with my mind. ;)
I noticed what might be one little typo; did you mean for the second part of the story to be titled "Six", the same as the first part? Usually the second part is titled in (what I assume is) French, so it just seemed off to me. Or it may have a hidden meaning that I didn't pick up on.
Anyway, fantastic chapter and story, and I'm eagerly awaiting your next update! :)Author's Response: Oh wow it made my day to see the jump in reviews, and what lovely reviews they were! I do have a pattern: italian for the title, english for the lifse we expect Andy to have lived and french for the life she could have had if she had stayed, but not only are those very loose terms, but for this, the french and english spellings were the same, which accidently worked out beautifully for the mirroring content of the sections.
The alternates do mess with your head. . I am planning to have some things the same, some wildly different to keep it realistic.
Anyway, thanks for the lovely lovely reviews! Muchly appreciated! Heading into mad bad exam times, but I will finish this story within the year, we're almost half way through as it! Report Review
Ah, so that's what happened. I really just love and am just enthralled by how that teeny-weeny decision made the difference from being most hated in school to most popular in school, to being her family's unwanted child to even more promising than Bellatris--imagine that!
I'm curious now, from your sentence:
"...and end with Sirius, the heir who already showed the spirit to live up to their glorious ancestors."
Will Sirius be the golden Black boy now that Andromeda, his favorite cousin and one of the only family members that he looked up to, has switched her attitude? Hmm. Now I'm going wild imagining the effect that would have on the Wizarding World and its history.
Whoa. Again, great chapter!Author's Response: Yes - I imagine her parents would have been thrilled to have an obedient daughter after the crazyness of Bella! Sirius is an interesting one. . I actually hadn't intended to change his story completely, only show that Andromeda must have affected him in some way, but I'm buzzing with ideas now of how that could pan out. .say if Andy had not set a precedent for defying the family, he might have delayed rebellion if it happened at all!
So wow.. you've given me a lot to think about, thankyou! Glad you enjoyed this chapter, and very happy you were so kind as to review! Report Review
I still liked this length; what I loved was how both scenes were nearly identical, both figuratively and literally in type, and just the way the paralleled each other.
And though I know that it isn't really the point of the story, I'm extremely curious as to how Andromeda's parents reacted to her homecoming. My guess is she was punished in an obscure way and confined to her room, but my imagination is running. It keeps a sense of mystery, though, and I like it.
Loved the chapter, as always! To the next.Author's Response: I am SO glad you liked the paralleling. It's intentional but I worried it would get painful.
I have to admit, I've kept things rather vague and open for the details, but thought provoking is wonderful.
Thankyou very much for the lovely reviews! Report Review
I liked this length--it still captures a moment or two in time, but it's more descriptive and detailed than the other chapters. I think that if it were much longer, it would seem a bit too much and stray from the purpose of the story.
I loved Andromeda's reaction in both parts of the chapter--especially the first part. I think that you captured how a sheltered pure-blood witch would feel the first time out on a Muggle scene, it was absolutely believable.
And in the second part, I can already feel her character molding to what everyone expects of her. It was also eerie yet fitting when the thought of throwing him off the rooftop creeps into her mind, I think that it really shows how damaging the lifestyle that she's been taught and forced to live is.
Of course, the Bellatrix-obsessed-me loved the little appearance she made. Though she's quickly in and out, I thought that you captured her character well.Author's Response: Yes, this is the perfect length as far as I am concerned. It's too difficult to write longer anyway :)
Yes, I think people tend to play down how hard a pureblood would find being muggle-fied, it would have been terrifying@
The rooftop impulse scared even me, and I am so glad you liked Bella - she's one of my favourite characters to write!
Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I think this has been my favorite chapter so far. I love how the two timelines (for lack of a better description for them) are so similar, yet Andromeda's reactions to them are so different. At the second party, she seems more focused on the party itself than the man she is with but at the first party she seems so much more focused on her interactions with Ted than anything else. And, she clearly had more fun at the first party. You describe them both beautifully, though. I can see both parties perfectly in my minds eye, even though you use so little words on the surroundings themselves.
"Andromeda has the sudden urge to push him off the edge of the rooftop, to watch as he spirals downwards to his death." Oh, my. She shares my opinion of the fiance exactly, I see.
In terms of length, I agree this does seem to be ideal. There is a bit more here to sink your teeth into, but you are still able to carry off the style of the piece. Any more would be too much, I think. Although I wish the chapters could be longer, just because I love reading this so much that I don't want them to end.
Oh, and before I go, I just wanted to let you know that I've nominated this story for Story Seekers. It's absolutely wonderful and probably one of the best stories I've read on here!
MaryAuthor's Response: Oh my goodness! Thankyou Mary, it's just.. I don't even know what to say, but I'm very honoured you like it so much!
And quite apart from lovely kind words that will swell my head but I adore anyway, is that reviews like this point out things I was trying to achieve, but didn't realise til I you pointed it out. Ok horribly confusing statement there: what I mean is that I intended for there to be a disparity between the two, but I didn't consciously seperate her focus, it's how it turned out and what I would have done if I stopped to think about it. /ramble
I was very interested in how people would take that line.. it's meant to be shocking, and it surprised even me when it popped in there *has no control over stories or characters*
Good to know thus length felt right, the style is more difficult either longer or shorter :O
Thankyou for such an amazing review and nomination! Report Review
Oh noes! Poor Ted.
I really thought you outdid yourself with this chapter. The matching of the sentences and the slight differences in mood and attitude were really something to read. Over all this chapter had a really nice effect to it. Great job, of course.
One thing, though--she doesn't know Ted's name in the second part. Something that I thought was really interesting and a lovely detail. However, towards the end you repeat the spell she has on "Ted" does not waver, and it just seemed a little inconsistent.
A small thing in an absolutely beautiful story. I really do love it, very much.
MirandaAuthor's Response: Miranda my duck, I haven't talked to you in FOREVER *is sad*. Life has just been mad, but I saw and squeeed over this review like you would not believe. It absolutely means the world that a writer like YOU is enjoying this. And very grateful for the pick up of such a silly error, thankee greatly, kind lady!
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"He bows to her and offers her flowers, rare, beautiful orchids he has imported especially for her. She hates them." LOL-ed so hard at that line. Andromeda is awesome.
Ted and Andie = total adorableness in this chapter. The line about him waiting for her was too sweet for words. And he gave her his coat! *swoon* I admit, I wasn't a big Andromeda/Ted shipper before reading this, it was more the concept of the story that initially drew me in, but if anyone can read this and not be converted then they are made of stone. Stone, I say! Of course, all the Andromeda/Ted loveliness makes dinner with the fiance all the more horrible. Git.
Oh, and I've read your response to my other review - what I meant by the school comment is most of the stories I see have the two of them thrown into all these ridiculous situations together where they can't help but fall in love which leads to Andromeda defying her family. Sort of a fated, meant-to-be scenario. I think thats probably why I wasn't a fan of this ship in the past - and why I am such a fan of your story now. Because, as I said before, its about the choice Andromeda makes - because I think there must have been so much more to their relationship than a few detentions or prefect meetings in each others company. You know? So no worries, no stuffing up here!Author's Response: Andromeda is probably one of my favourite characters, I'm glad she's coming across well!
I have always adored tedromeda to pieces, it's one of the ships I never tire of reading, and it's simply.. lovely.. to hear that this piece changed your mind in any way *dies just a little from delight*
It's also fun with writing period pieces in that you can be more natural in playing with ideas of courtship and gentleman-liness.
Oh I see what you mean - yes, there are some awful ones where she marries him only to escape her family or they can't control their hormones etc. Didn't want to go that route for the exact reasons you said - this is about choice, and it's a huge choice!
Thankyou so much for such kind, as well thought provoking reviews! I do appreciate it! Report Review
Hi! Back again, and this time I have actually looked up Sliding Doors - and now I am even more excited to read this story! :) I like the way you are setting things up, with each chapter split between the two options Andromeda could make. It adds interest, plus avoids any possible confusion that could ensue if you put them in different chapters - personally, I'm pretty sure I would have had to check each time which I was reading if you'd done it that way.
I'm interested to see how heavily you draw on the movie in this story, now that I know what the movie is about. Will you just borrow the basic structure, or will you draw more heavily on the plot than that? I suppose I will have to wait and see. Although I am hoping that option one doesn't end the same way.
Oh, PS - who is her fiance? He's a git. I've decided this in the 0.5 seconds of story time he's been allotted.
MaryAuthor's Response: It's an amazing movie, I would recommend it! It's more of an inspiration, Andromeda was someone whose life could have gone either way. Can't say anything about the ending, but I do have that planned very tightly!
I agree about the structure, it would have been impossible to maintain in seperate chapters. Initially this was going to be a oneshot but even that was too confusing!
LOL at the fiance! You will see.. or maybe not. Time will tell!
Thanks again for the review! I love that you are enjoying my story, and it means a lot that you took the time to review! Report Review
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