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Review #1, by jennyangelface Prologue: Lily Luna Potter, Future Quidditch Star

6th March 2011:
Ahh, I remember reading this story, but I never left a review the first time. Sorry about that. But I'm here now :)

I thought this story was very fluffy, and a refreshing take on next generation quidditch stories. I am actually surprised no one write more stories where the Potter children are full of themselves, considering that they are Harry Potter's children. I especially enjoyed reading it from an eleven year old's perspective. It seems no one does that either.

I think that you made the story very believable throughout. The whole time, I felt like I was really listening to a First Year speaking because even your sentences sounded so First Year. :)

Also, you said that you don't really write humour, but this story made me smile. It's like one of those more subtlely humorous stories, but you know, not that subtle. Anyway, before I go off rambling about the different nuances of fictional prose humour, I'll just stop and say that it was funny.

Keep writing. :D

Author's Response: Thank you for returning -- it's so brilliant you left a review! In my head the Potter children couldn't be anything but stuck-up. Perhaps not to the same extent, but all that media attention must have affected them somehow.

I love writing eleven-year-olds. I am eleven at heart (seventeen? no! never!) so I feel at home. And I'm glad I sound like a First Year too! I love hearing that I'm writing realistically. And I've become better at humour, I think. I'm getting the hang of it at last.

Thanks again! xx

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Review #2, by Paddy Wanted: Cameron MacDonald, preferably hexed.

21st September 2010:
Please continue this story! I want to know the rest :D

Author's Response: I'll try, soon, I promise. Thank you for the review!

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Review #3, by doratonks14 Prologue: Lily Luna Potter, Future Quidditch Star

27th February 2010:
Oh my goodness!

This was amazing! Great job with your challenge, you did this perfectly! Lily was hysterical, going on about being the greatest Quidditch player ever and about how big of a git he was. Honestly, if I hadn't given you the challenge and known that you didn't do humor often, I wouldn't have known it. This was truly awesome.

The only thing is, when you tried to italicize, you still have the coding around the words. I think you're supposed to use the brackets like this [] to italicize. But I might be wrong so don't quote me on that. That's just me being picky though. It didn't detract from the story, I just thought you might want to know cause it looked a little weird.

Honestly, this was brilliant. After reading your A/N, I'm so excited that you're going to write a short story after this as well, because this was really really good. I'll be sure to check back later for it.

Congrats on rocking this challenge! I hope you had fun with it. :D 10/10 Thank you so so much for participating.

Author's Response: Gosh, thank you! I loved writing Lily, she was so awful but so much fun. Eleven-year-olds are pretty much the best things to write ever, I think.

I've fixed the coding issue - I had the right codes, but I didn't use the simple editor. I got excited about the 1 hour queue and all that...

My problem is that I have never been able to write a second chapter of a WIP - so... I'm really not sure how that will unfold. If ever.

Thank you so much for the amazing review, hun, and I'm absolutely chuffed.

- emma xx

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