Gubby... I don't know what to say to you, in all honesty. You must know that you are one of my favourite authors of all time (both in fanfiction and in original fiction) because you've got one of the most beautiful styles I've ever come across. With every piece I read of yours I am more and more impressed. Your talent seems to know no bounds and for that I'll always keep coming back to read your work. One day, I'll sit down and read everything you've got to offer and I know I won't be disappointed. You never disappoint.
What is wonderful about every piece you craft is the beauty of your language. You must surely know how fabulous your style is, your description, your narrative, your voice... it's so unique and entrancing and I was easily sucked in right from the beginning. Every word is poetry and you don't even have to try (or so it would seem). I think what is most extraordinary is that not only are you an impressively talented writer, but your ideas are just absolutely stunning. I'd love to spend a day inside your mind and question your imagination because it surely has to be the most vivid and fascinating than anything I've seen portrayed on page before. if that makes any sense... and also doesn't come off as stalkerish. Because you honestly fascinate me because it seems like you could have been writing for years and years and years; every time I read something of yours I think you've surely reached perfection but then you go and improve and impress me once again. I've never seen anything like it.
Now, your ideas... I'll be very honest and admit that they're far beyond anything my poor little brain can cope with, but for me that's part of the enjoyment I get from reading your fics. I know that what I'm reading is superior to 99% of all fanfic because it's so advanced, so well-developed and so brilliantly formed. I finished this fic with my thinking cap on and I adore the stimulus. I'm not just blown away by your stunning writing but by the plots you manage to portray in so few words.
Another thing I loved was how we never find out who the characters are. Well, actually, I sometimes find that really annoying, just because I like to know who these people are so I can sort out the scene in my head. But that's just me, I wouldn't have this any other way. That mystery really enhances everything you've written about, from the description to the haunting dialogue dispersed between it. See, things like that would annoy me no end if not written well, but because your language and writing is so... I've exhausted all the adjectives, but because you're so good at what you do you stop me from caring about technicalities. I was utterly sucked in.
I absolutely adored this line (as well as many others): the gesture sweeps over the vast ruination of the world, the dirty skies and the tawdry houses, the graying countryside and the corrupt cities. Just absolutely, simply beautiful.
Thanks for requesting, I'm sorry I can't give any coherent/constructive feedback. You've blown me away.
- Marina Report Review
One of the best written one-shots (or fanfics in general) I've found on this site. It didn't really strike me as belonging to the Harry Potter realm, but not all stories need to be saturated with magical terms and spells. I think you did a good job at trying to get inside Helen's mind (unless you were basing a different character off of Helen) and figure out what she would have been thinking while in Troy with Paris. I think you ended it at just the right moment as well and that it was good that you didn't try to stretch the ending out more. It seems very natural and realistic.
Overall, very good job. You should be very proud of yourself for writing something that melds beauty, confusion, and desire so well. (Plus, mythology is a personal interest of mine and I rather enjoyed reading "The Iliad"). :)
- Anders -Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I think you should do more reading if I could ever match up to the legends that are on HPFF, but it's awfully flattering of you to say that. I agree that this isn't exactly Harry Potter fanfic per se, but the thought process, to me, is what counts, and I always approached the story with the idea that these were canon characters. I wasn't writing exactly about Helen and Paris, merely relating the characters here to the mythological ones, but I'm glad you liked it. And I'm also happy that you mentioned the ending; I never know when I'm ending something and have to keep writing until I've hit the right line.
Sadly, I've never read The Iliad, but intend to. I did like this piece, but after this, I'm much more partial to it. Thank you very much for this lovely review! :) Report Review
Aww... romanticness!Author's Response: Funnily enough, I don't think it's romantic at all. But thank you for reviewing! :) Report Review
I wonder who it is... Surely, on Harry Potter, it wouldn't be your take on a Myth, and so I say founders. Rowena Ravenclaw and Godric Gryffindor swim in my mind; they fit to my view.
I think it's right that you use italics instead of speech marks. It makes everything seem soft, somehow, much less daunting and casual. You make poetry without writing lines.
xEAuthor's Response: It isn't really my take on a myth and is barely inspired by it; really it's the reference to Helen of Troy that makes the fic what it is. I never thought of Godric and Rowena, and now that I think about it, it fits. (I love seeing what people think of the characters!). Also, I'm so happy someone commented on the italics v quotation marks issue; I don't remember my reasoning for it, but I'm glad that you liked it better. Thank you so, so much! :) Report Review
Ah, this was beautiful.
Sometimes stories with the absence of names quite annoy me, but I liked the use of simply 'she' and 'he' through this one. I liked the emotion and the vocabulary used made it seem simply poetic. I rather enjoyed the flow.
Nice work!Author's Response: It never really annoys me, per se, because I like the ambiguity and enjoy puzzling out what the author and the characters are thinking. But I'm glad that you didn't mind it and that you liked it at all. Thank you so much! :) Report Review
I've read this one a couple of times so that I could take in everything, as there is a lot here. Most of me kept second-guessing myself as to which canon character you have included here, and I think it might be Eileen Prince, but I wouldn't bet any money on that. :P It could equally be Andromeda or one of many witches who has paired up with a Muggle. I really liked the connection to Paris and Helen, especially in how they viewed one another in such mixed and ambiguous ways.
But that's not a really important point, not in comparison to the quality of the writing here. Honestly, Gubby, with every new story you seem to outdo yourself, creating something more and more stunning. It's a very short moment, but there's so much emotion and thought here. Then there's the language and the style - there's a coldness, a premonition of something negative to come, in the words and the phrases. It's not romantic, but there is a poetry to it that made me want to read it again before settling in to review. The fact that it uses Yeats also makes me happy. ^_^
I really, really loved this, Gubby, and I can't put into words why or what about it captures me so. It's an amazing piece of writing.Author's Response: I've tried responding to this several times over the last few days and always came to a block (I don't know how you come to a block in a response, but there you have it), so here's hoping this turns out well :)
Anyway. I'm surprised that you're relating Paris to a Muggle and Helen to a witch - I think I see the connection, but I'm not sure. I definitely wouldn't have thought of that, which is one of the reasons why I like doing ambiguous characters; it always astounds me how completely stupid, or wrong, I was about these things. I'm also glad that you understand the connection between the two. The "mixed and ambiguous ways" is partly because, at 12:30 AM, it was hard to keep things straight in my head. I like to think that they didn't know exactly what they felt at any given moment, either.
Honestly, Susan? I don't know what to say to that. I do try to improve with each fic, or to tackle something different, but this was different. After so long without something new, I definitely viewed it differently, which might have something to do with it. I must say that so much of this was inspired by Yeats' poem - the something negative you mentioned, and the coldness and everything. I'd love to tell you the whole story behind the story, but I would be cut off here. I'd love to discuss the whole story, and the story behind the story, with you in further detail, so please don't hesitate to PM me ^_^
Every time you stop by, you rob me of the words to express my gratitude. I'm also running out of ways to say how much you and your reviews mean to me. I am eternally grateful and ever so thankful for everything... so thank you. Report Review
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