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Review #1, by Reveille the love between us die

1st March 2010:
This was so amazing - I never expected that gender-bender, but it just added to the awesomeness and originality. This was so well-written, and I'm in love with the whole concept.

As for the last line - love it. It fits well with the story, I think, and leaves a little to be desired, a little piece of the story open to interpretation, which is great.

A full ten from me.

-Katie (:

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Review #2, by Brittany the love between us die

24th February 2010:
I loved the last line.

I really liked this one... I wasn't expecting it for some reason. (I mean, besides the obvious male/female switch.)

Good work :)

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Review #3, by GubraithianFire the love between us die

18th February 2010:
HI AGAIN!

So I don't know why you've got this delusion that you "can't write angst." That is such absurdity I don't know what I need to do to enlighten you. Clearly you are much better at it than you think you are, or maybe you're just fishing for more praise, which I don't think you need to do as you've got plenty already. And more coming your way. Go you!

So, anyway. I don't know if you saw my comment, but I was surprised that this is what came of the song I gave you, which is kind of happy and celebratory (but in the long run is actually quite tragic, which is why I'm only kind of surprised). However, the challenge was to be inspired, so I can hardly complain :D Anyway, I'm quite impressed with this, even if you call it "crap." When an author of your caliber calls something "crap," I usually don't believe it; again, they're either truly delusional or truly egotistical. In any case, I think it was really wonderful and not crap at all! Am quite flabbergasted at how you could possibly think so. I'm not going to lie, though: the whole male-Dominique female-Lorcan threw me off a little bit. Well, more than a little bit. I guess it's just proof of how firmly we've been indoctrinated in the "Dominique is SO A GIRL" school of thought :P

I do think you handled the plot and everything very well. It was tragic, but not as bad when it came to that line about how he would move on and she wouldn't. I thought it was interesting that you said that Lor can't love someone completely, because it's a development most people don't go for in their characters. It's unique and refreshing and very, very human. It also makes me wonder if perhaps it's not just that: maybe she's just a commitment-phobe, and thinks that because she hasn't been in love yet, she never will be. And I like that it's Lorcan (the girl) who is unsure of herself, as opposed to the boy (Dominique; don't mind this, it's to remind myself who is who). The writing itself is lovely, eloquent but not too uppity, so again, it feels very human. It's actually something I'd like to see more in both fanfic and movies, especially the type the challenge focuses on. Too often, the characters are caricatures, representing a concept or an ideal and not real people.

I actually quite love the last line: too few people would do something like that, which many would say doesn't really provide a sense of "The End"-ness. I think it does: I really do like it.

Please, don't doubt yourself. Trust in yourself and your dedicated readership - we heart you. Especially me. And CPine (I wish. Well, actually, I'd like it if he heart-ed me, as well. But I'll let you share.)

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