Reading Reviews for A Grey Day
  
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Review #1, by malfoyfan In A Grey Life

23rd February 2010:
I love it! Very good! :)

Author's Response: Thank You, thank you!

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Review #2, by Pointless Nostalgic  In A Grey Life

22nd February 2010:
That was quite a pleasure! The story was a nice snapshot of both her disposition and the burden she must carry throughout her life. What I really loved about it was that you weren't afraid to mention her flaws, and furthermore, she was well aware of her flaws. It didn't feel cliche, which was refreshing to say the least.

I liked that you touched on the dilemma of a Witch marrying a Muggle. Marriage was certainly political at that time for Muggles, but that addition of blood purity in this time period adds a whole new layer to the dilemma of marriage.

The scene in which you integrated the quote made me smile. The Baron was so wonderfully malevolent, and Helena's reactions were delightfully feisty. The quote was put in seamlessly and it felt completely natural, which is great to see.

As for the language, for the most part, you were faithful to Shakespeare's vernacular without becoming too convoluted. There were a few times where I got a bit caught up in the language, but I commend you for working with this language. I'm really impressed with how you utilized it with such finesse, yet kept it flowing naturally. It made it a lot of fun to read!

Overall, I really enjoyed it a lot. Thanks so much for participating, and congratulations on a great piece!

-Christine

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lengthy response to this story. I was really worried about it when I was writing it, so this defiantly helped. I hoped to make it as realistic as possible without making it seem ridiculously unmagical. And thank you! I had a lot of fun with the language. Add a couple thees and thys here and there and you've got fake Shakespeare! Haha. Thank you so much!

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