Hey there!! I was SO shocked when I saw a new chapter!! and not just a new chapter - an AMAZING chapter!!
this is so adorable!! I love it!
you managed it perfectly. I mean Davy is so cute and nice but I also feel extremely sorry for James. he seems so lost and mournful! And I love it that you make Lily this sensible and far-sighted!
Hogsmeade day was wonderful though it left James a little miserable. I'm really looking forward to next chapter. I bet something interesting will happen in holidays xD :)
I just really hope you won't stop writing this because it's MOST DEFINITELY one of my favorite stories :)
- Mary :)Author's Response: THANK YOU!!! You don't know who surprised I was to see a new review! haha :D
Thank you so much for your amazing review. I'm glad that you liked the chapter! I have found that quite a few people, while they don't necessarily hate it, are not big fans of Lily dating other guys. :D From the start I have set out to write the most realistic story possible from the information that we have from J.K. Rowling. Time and time again Lily was described as beautiful and popular..so of course she would have dated before James! :)
I really appreciate the fact that you like my portrayal of Lily! The way people characterize her in their stories, while hilarious due to the crazy things she does, has seemed to me to lack a faithfulness to her descriptions in the books. She's supposed to be smart and wonderful and kind. As such I have always felt that she must have noticed that James, while insufferable at times, was truly a good person.
Yes. I definitely want something huge to happen during the holidays. Because of such I've been a bit stuck, but I'm working through it. :)
I promise I won't give up on my story!! I've been planning this for a long time and now that I've started it, I am determined to finish it. :)
Thanks again for taking time to review!!! It certainly helps to motivate me to burst through the writers block that I am constantly plagued with!!! :D Report Review
love it!! I like the small development the relationship of James and Lily, it's so adorable. :) please update soon;) (L)Author's Response: thank you for reading!! and i really really do appreciate your review!!! I'll keep on working on it :) Report Review
I thought it was brilliant!!! U can't wait to read more!!!Author's Response: thank you so much! :D i'll work to get the next chapter up soon!! Report Review
Oooh I'm so happy you've updated!! :D
Really, when I saw the new chapter, I couldn't believe my eyes, I was so amazed and excited to read it!!!
So, after reading it, I found it really pleasant, brilliant actually! I like that Lily feels some guilt about James because it shows that she isn't a insensitive and self-centred person who doesn't care about other's feelings (I say that because a great many authors portray her like that...)
Keep writing, I can't wait to read it more! ;D And I hope so bad there will be some James & Lily's confrontations in the next chapter !
[Oh by the way: I apologize in advance for my bad English; I'm French and I can't speak English fluently, I hope you'll understand! ;) ]Author's Response: bad english??? it made perfect sense! lol
Thank you so much for leaving such an amazing review!!! I'm really glad that you liked it. Yeah, a lot of authors tend to write Lily as kind of heartless. But I've always felt that Lily, who was always portrayed in the books as someone who was always fair and non-judgmental, must have at least seen some good qualities in James. :)
I'll definitely keep on writing! I really want to get my view on their story written. Even if it takes me a while I promise I'll get it done!! Report Review
Please, I'm begging you, update soon! :'(Author's Response: sorry!!! i haven't had internet for a long time! and i've been super busy as well, but I've been able to squeeze in some writing so i'm working on updating asap!!! Report Review
Hey this story is great! I really love the drama between James and Lily, and the way the characters' persona is being built up. Keep this up, it's awesome!
And update soon :)Author's Response: thank you so much for reading and for taking the time to review!! i am working on updating soon, finally got the internet back up! lol Report Review
I like where this is going! Revenge is always fun :)
Love this!Author's Response: thanks :D keep reading please!! Report Review
Great.. I wish you would write more. It is such a great story and I really want to know what's going to happen. :)Author's Response: i have like another chapter fully written, i think im going to try and upload it now since the waiting time is so short...thanks for coming back :D Report Review
I like how you include Snape in here. Most authors just forget about him in their stories (I myself am guilty of this). Sorry that I'm suckishly lugging through this story. Life's been crazy :P Great so far though :)Author's Response: what matters is that you've taken an interest and are making an effort to read through my story! that in itself means so much to me! thank you for taking time to review!! Report Review
I Love It!
Pleasa don't stop writing i can't wait to know what's going to happend! ("Author's Response: i wont stop writing i promise :D but it might take a while lol Report Review
Just continue and maybe I'll forgive you. ;D. *Winky face*. So yeah... just continue please!!!Author's Response: yay! I'll try and get the next one up asap!! Report Review
That was AWESOME!!! I loved it :D Just the drama between James and Lily, and everything, was just...amazing! PLEASE post the next one soon!!! I can't wait ^^Author's Response: THANKS!!! I'm terrible at time management and right now I don't have a lot of time to manage...but I promise that I WILL finish this story, no matter how long it takes. Report Review
holly fantastic, that was really awesome chapter!
you really noticed the main property of boys - they think they can do everything but they're beloved can't. James' position was just the same.
Also the Davy Gudgeon moments were great too. it's fun and more interesting to see new characters in the story.
so chapter was truly lovely, i'd be happy to see next chapter soon. don't stop writing, you're really good at that : )))
MaryAuthor's Response: thank you thank you thank you!!! I've worked so hard in trying to make my story as real as possible, and to hear comments like that just make my day! I'll definitely never ever give up on this story, especially if I keep on getting feedback like yours! Thanks again!!! Report Review
So I really like this story, and I think you have the potential to be a really GREAT writer! Lily seems so canon, it makes me happy :)
I'm going to come back and read the rest of your story, but right now, I have school.
Great first chapter though!!Author's Response: thanks! I definitely understand what that's like. I'm super busy right now as well. The progress on this story is going to be slow as well lol. Well hopefully you do find time to get back to my story and hopefully you like the rest of what I have to write! :D Report Review
Love it!! Update soon please!!!
great job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Oh my god, exciting! I love this chapter!
Just pointing out, but didnt you say in the last chapter Frank asked Alice out? maybe i miss-read it...
ahah great job!
10/10Author's Response: i'll go back and check that out lol :D thanks!! Report Review
Loving this story!! Massive congratulations!
10/10Author's Response: omg! thank you so so so much!! Report Review
Hey. It's 1/25/11 and I only see 10 chapters. Is there suppose to be more? Anyways.. I loved this chapter. Keep writing and post faster. ;)Author's Response: i'm pretty sure that's all there is. what i'm doing right now is editing and adding chapter images to previous chapters. I dont have a whole lot of time right now, but hopefully i can finish up my story before too long. thanks for reading!! Report Review
There you go! You have all your letters!
So, this chapter is definitely not as intense as usual but hopefully it'll pick up again, because even though this is a good chapter, I like the intenseness of the other chapters.
I really hope you update soon! I really like this story and I want to see what happens!
-secret santaAuthor's Response: Yeah. I feel like it's missing something too. I'm working on editing what I've got down of my story right now... and then my laptop broke down. So with that being said, I don't really know how long it will be until I post a new chapter, or how long it will take me to finish editing my previous chapters. However, I won't give up on this story. I've worked really hard on it, and I am determined to finish it even if it takes me a long time :D thanks for all your awesome reviews!! Report Review
I think I like this chapter the best so far! James and Lily are both really well written, and James just keeps getting sweeter and sweeter. I really love the story progression you've got going on here. Awesome!
-secret santaAuthor's Response: AWWW! Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you like my story so much! Again, I'm so happy that you like the way I've written the characters! Report Review
Remus is so sweet! I love him! I love his friendship with Lily, in a way it almost seems like it could replace the close friendship with Snape. I'm not sure if you'll do that or not, that's just what it seems like at this point.
So I'm really interested to see what'll happen next (as usual)! On I go!
-secret santaAuthor's Response: I'm glad I didn't lose your interest! I think that's why my chapters almost always end in something dramatical. I try to keep my reader's attention. So, at least in your case, looks like I've done a good job in that! :D Report Review
James is so sweet towards the end there! I like it!
Wow, you are good at writing arguments. They're all so intense. Dialogue seems to be your strong point.
Yet another great chapter!
P.S. forgot to mention... when/if you unscramble the letters and you think you've got it right, post as your forum status "_, are you my secret santa?" If you're wrong, I won't comment, but if you're right, I will confirm it. :D ok? Cool?Author's Response: I must agree with that. Dialogue always seems to be the easiest part of writing for me. James is such a sweetie sometimes :D Report Review
Oh no! I actually feel kinda bad for Snape, but on the other hand I totally get what Lily`s getting at and I agree with her.
Finally!!! They have something in common!!! :D YAY!!!
Great chapter, intense as usual!
-secret santaAuthor's Response: Yeah I love Snape. I think he might be my favorite HP character. He just can't make the choices that Lily would have approved of. Yes! Common ground!! :D thanks! Report Review
Aww, that wasn't nice! :P I'm being a hypocrite by saying that because there's this one guy who kinda acts like James (and kinda acts like I'm Lily) who I'd totally punch and then flick. So I won't criticize her. Plus, it was HILARIOUS.
Great job on this chapter!
-secret santaAuthor's Response: Definitely not the nicest thing to do, but I'm glad that you find it relatable! Like I've said before I work really hard to make the relationships in my story seem real. I work to try and illustrate as much of the complicated and real feelings that I think the characters must feel! So I'm glad that even though some things that Lily might do seem a bit overdramatic, you think that they are definitely plausible! thanks for your reviews!! Report Review
I love how your chapters sort of start softly and then end with something really intense. It's pretty cool. :D
I love the way you are portraying Lily and Snape's friendship. It's very special. So sad when you know what happens. :( At least if this stays canon.
-secret santaAuthor's Response: My story will definitely stay canon. I have a difficult time sometimes in writing their dynamic relationship. I want them to seem real, so whenever someone says that they think I've done a good job with Lily and Severus, it means the world to me! Report Review
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