This is really good. I quite like the descriptions and such :) Report Review
this was good for the most part and thoroughly enjoyable but at times it seemed to drone on with repeated interactions and excessive fluff even for me as if it were 5- 10 chapters too long .. But in the end I stuck through it to say good work! Report Review
Very good. Louis and Louise LOL, i once wrote a short fanfic that had Al and Ali... it took me a while to notice too, but it suited them so i kept it. Cant wait to read on... Report Review
I think you have a good story line but you need to revise and cut up some of you paragraphs because they are very long and make it harder to read. The story is very fast moving and that also makes it harder to read. I think you need to add more details in parts of it to make it more understandable. Report Review
-melts into a pile of goo on the floor-
Aww. That is just too cute. Teddy and Victoire are the perfect couple. I loved how nervous he was at first, when he was trying to ask her out. It's always so much fun to tease a boy when they're doing that :P
I would write a longer review but my contact is killing me and I must go amend this situation!Author's Response: Ha ha, oh noes! You are goo.
I'm really glad that not only did you find them cute, but the perfect couple. I adore Teddiore, and I'm not quite sure why so many people find them 'boring'. It is quite vexing.
Hehe, yes, poor nervous Teddy is quite adorable, and I agree. Tons of teasing potential is there.
Oh, that's okay. Go fix your contact. I would think that death by contact wouldn't be too amazing. Report Review
Ooh, Dominique could have been in a lot of trouble there, haha! I'm glad that her and Lysander are together, though. I quite like them as a couple, just something about it sounds good.
I think you pull off writing the characters we know better, like Bill and Fleur etc. very well. They seem completely canon and still interesting to read. I'm glad Bill still has his long hair and fang earring. Gotta love a guy with style :P
I'm excited to see what happens next! The date with Teddy is quite the source of anticipation.Author's Response: Ha ha, yes. Dom seems like she gets herself into scads of trouble in this story, but she means well. I love her. Since I paired Rose with Scorpius in this story, I decided to toss Dominique with Lysander.
Thank you! I really appreciate that you think that I write them well. I have to admit that I've always had a soft spot for Bill (and Charlie), and I'm always disappointed in how little time they get shown in the HP series, itself.
Aw, I'm glad that you're excited to see what happens next. :) Report Review
Dreaming of Teddy, indeed.
Poor Victoire. I always feel quite useless when I'm all cooped up in bed as well (if I'm cooped up in bed by choice it's an entirely different matter, :P).
The visit from Teddy was great. I love the way they interact with each other. I think the great thing about Teddy and Victoire is that they just seem to fit so perfectly together and you get to write them all romantic and fluffy without it being overdone.
And you fit in the fact that Rose and Scorpius are together seamlessly. It would have been awkward if you'd have written a lengthy explanation as to the who, what, when, where, why of the ScoRose relationship, so I'm pleased you didn't.Author's Response: Yes, she loves herself some Teddy.
Yeah, she doesn't like being laid up. She would rather be bouncing around doing what she does best. Going after the bad guys.
I'm really glad that you liked Teddy's visit and the way that they interact between one another. Yes, overdone fluff is the worst, I think. It makes me want to gag.
Thanks. I'm pleased that you liked them, too. Rose cracks me up. She is such a spaz. Report Review
I finally found some time to continue reading this!
The great thing about this chapter is the taste of drama we get. You didn't mess around with loads of filler, no action chapters. You jumped right in with some good drama, which I love.
I like how brave Victoire was to do what she did, even if it wasn't the brightest idea in the world. We can just blame McLaggen for that :P He definitely deserved to be fired.
Teddy's protectiveness was absolutely adorable. I always picture him to be like that for Victoire.Author's Response: Time is something of a rarity, it would seem for some people. Glad you could take some time out of your schedule for this. :)
Yeah, I try not to do too many filler chapters. I would rather just jump into the drama, but sometimes I have to tell myself to slow down. I get very excited about the action.
Yes, sometimes bravery can also be seen as stupidity. I, too, blame McLaggen. He's a pain in the butt, for sure.
Ha ha, thanks. That's how I picture Teddy, too. I love him. He is uber squishy in this story. Report Review
Victoire is smart. You should never go out with a guy who seriously refers to himself as a stud muffin. It's just a no.
Speaking of the stud muffin, McLaggen is just as annoying as one would hope and assume him to be. I like your characterization of him. I think it definitely suits his genetics, haha.
Definitely looking forward to some more Teddy/Victoire interaction :P
EricaAuthor's Response: Hehe, why thank you. I'm sure Victoire appreciates that sentiment.
Ha ha, thank you. I'm glad that you liked his characterization. I mostly threw him in there for comic relief, and to bring a blast from the past into the next generation.
Of course, not everyone is like their parents, but that was too good to pass up.
Well, as it's Teddy/Vic, there shouldn't be a shortage of that running about. :P
Linders Report Review
There aren't many long Teddy/Victoire stories on this site, and I was really excited to find one by you!
I think it's great so far. Sometimes the in love with your best friend thing can come off tired and boring and cliche, but this didn't give off any of those vibes to me at all.
I like the way you write the characters. They're fresh and by that I mean that you don't stick to how everyone else writes next generation characters, you write them how they fit in the story. Which is nice because sometimes I feel like people don't do anything original with the characters who, though they ARE canon, are basically OCs with which you can mold as you please. So I definitely appreciate you doing your own thing instead of the norm.
Very good so far. I can't wait to read more(:Author's Response: I've noticed this myself. I'm not quite sure why that is, but I adore them.
Thank you so much, I'm really glad that you're enjoying it thus far. I agree, it can come across as both of those things if you push it too quickly or slowly.
I'm really pleased that you think that this is a fresh take on the characters. I personally hate how some people to 'copy' the same version of next gens, as it's thoroughly annoying.
Thanks so much! I'm really pleased you liked it. Report Review
another great chapter. next chapter!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. :3 Report Review
another great chapter this one. i liked at how at the end, Andromeda said that Victoire had spirit. reading next chapter now.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: I'm glad that you think so. :) Report Review
i'm so sorry to review now but life was more important at the time. anyway, great chapter this one and i'm going to read the next chapter now!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Hey, that's okay! I understand. I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter.
Linders Report Review
this is being funny so far. i can't wait to read more from u!!!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Ha ha, indeed. Thanks. I'll try to update it soon. My muse has wandered in other directions. ♥ Report Review
it was about time that someone taught McLaggen a lesson. i'm going to read the next chapter now.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: He he, indeed. I don't like him much, either. Guess that's obvious, but eh, he's my OC I can hate him as much as I want. ;) Report Review
hmm... the flashing of the camera is very suspicious to me but i'll find out when i read the next chapter. i just have to wait 4 the next update!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: ;) Yes, you will. Report Review
Dominique bickering with Louis is hilarious, i must say. i'll go read the next chapter now.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Heh, Dom and Louis live to bicker. I think it's simply because they have similar personalities. They bring out the worst in one another, but they would have each others backs if the other one ever truly needed them. Report Review
Bill is so stubborn! he needs to let that problem with his daughter Dom, go! other than that, this story is being enjoyable so far. will u update soon please?^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: I will try to. I'm working on a Bloody Baron/Grey Lady piece right now. I was inspired suddenly, but I will try to get back to this one, too. I love Teddy/Vic. x3
Bill indeed is very stubborn. Report Review
Dom and Lysander are a fantastic pair! teddy and Victoire working together? that's going to be fun...^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Indeed, they are. I feel bad for putting Dom in this situation, but she'll get through all right. Report Review
it's was funny to see Bill acting all grumpy just because no one would hear him. keep up the great work!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Ha ha, glad you found that amusing. I like grumpy Bill, he amuses me, too. Report Review
this is getting really good! keep it up!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you think so. ^_^ Report Review
Your banner is gorgeous !Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it. I didn't make it, though. I got it from The Dark Arts. ^_^ Report Review
i hope Victoire will be saved in time and that all the Death Eaters will be arrested.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Hehe, you shall see. ♥ Report Review
it was hilarious when Dom and Louis teased Victorie and i'm going to read the next chapter...^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Heh, I'm glad you found that amusing. Off with you - read, read! Report Review
Well first off I have to say I'm incredibly happy that dominique is the pregnant one and not victoire! I saw the chapter title and almost wanted to cry for her but then I found out that Dom was the pregnant one and I was like "WOHO!" so thanks for not messing up victoires life and making her preggers with dolohov's baby!
Also this story is amazing and awesomely well written! So YAY! for you.
Update soon?Author's Response: Heh. Thank you. Yes, Dom and Lysander apparently weren't careful enough. Ha ha. Yes, I wouldn't do that to Vic. That would be too evil. I'm really glad that you find that the story is amazing and well written. I will try to update soon. ^_^ Report Review
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