This was really good! My one suggestion would be to make sure that you say "Seventh Year" instead of "Seventh Grade".Author's Response: awesome thank you! Report Review
I think I understand the Review you just gave me for The Founder's Revenge. You are not a fan of Long stories, you only do one-shots, you write about James and Lilly as the main character's.
I felt like you dropped me into the middle of some point of time. I had no reference as to when, where, or how the characters got to a dance. In my opinion I would have appreciated a build up as to how they got there.
I also felt like like some of the events were left incomplete and were a bit off track.
You do have some very nice writing in places and I do appreciate the effort you put in to your story.Author's Response: im sorry i was rude in the review.
i get annoyed when i dont understand where the characters are coming from,
i do think you need to develop on building up the story.
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oh my god cutest ever straight to favs :) how can you not love james lily? ;) love how you describe them both in your stories, after i'm done reviewing i'll go read your first story you published. 10/10 and favs + hoping you'll be updating more of these beautiful stories? :)
love - joAuthor's Response: aww thank youu. My faves are Rose/Scorp but that doesnt work with Drace/Hermione so I'm torn, Lily/James i find easiest to write coz its mostly guesswork. Report Review
SO ADORABLE! I friggin adored it! Awesome Job~ and I'm going to see your other stories now! *Claps* -CharlyAuthor's Response: awww thank youuu. i basically take my other stories and harrypotterize them.. hehe Report Review
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