Wonderful chapter! I really love this story. It sounds exactly like how a high school girl would feel, and I think you are portraying everyone excellently. Report Review
this story is great!
please update soon!
thanks a bunch! Report Review
I loved it~ I just began reading it today as I'm new here and taking my sweet time reading what-ever story catches my eye.
Violet is very well written, believable and a lovable character.
Keep writing I'm hoping to read more soon? Report Review
Yay! I have caught up with you finally! But now i'm gonna have to wait for the next chappie :( please update soon! I really enjoyed this chapter I think sirius should start tutoring her now cas she messed up as it would be very romantic ;) i'll try to calm it with the sirius fing from now on :S Oh & i'd love 4 u 2 check out my story hiding bruises! It has a similar shy girl theme thing :) lily xx Report Review
Helloo, well that was eventfull! :P bree is really annoying, i would tell you to get rid of her but all stories need at least one evil person so she'll have to stay. I'm really glad violet is getting away from her now though :) at the start of the chapter i was thinking 'i so hope she gets picked for the team' and wallah, you read my mind! Cant wait to see how practice goes. :) Lily xxAuthor's Response: i hate Bree too, yep i agree but hopefully not for too long. i'm so grateful for you taking the time to express your opinion. xxx Report Review
Heyy again :) you seriously have me hooked on this story! I love it :) she's such a great character. I really liked the date and am so glad she wasnt all shy with him! what do i want to happen? I want sirius to steal her away, i'm sorry i no he's a cocky d*** but i love him anyways :) goin on to next chappie now! Lily xxAuthor's Response: hai:) oh gosh that means so much to me, THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU. oh gosh i love sirius too Report Review
Hello :) yay! I'm no 1 reviewer :) but its not cas of me that you got 70+ reviews! its cas of your amazing writing! ;) :P anyway it was a good chapter :) i like that she has some sort of special power thing and cant wait to see where that goes. Oh, violet and williams date should be interesting :) he seems nice but is she ever gonna get with sirius cas i love him! :) lily xxAuthor's Response: thank you so much lovely :') ahh hopefully i can intergrate it later into the story, but i'm glad to here you liked the idea, i was wondering if it was a wee bit random. ah well you will just have to wait and see ;)
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hey :) I'm back once again! Fillers annoy some people but personally i think you do need them for a good story :) and some cool stuff happened in this one! I like the way you write the lily/james relationship as its always done differently.I cant wait to see how you show her starting to like him, please dont do it too quick whatever you do cas that really annoys me! :) lily xxAuthor's Response: Hello inspiredl, you are now officially my favourite reviewer. Thank you so much for taking the time to voice your opinion :) && for moving me out of the 60s and into the 70s!
Ah yeah, i am always worried about moving too fast throughout my stories, so a quick filler is necessary on occasion. Rose xx
Hey :) i'm back. I enjoyed this chapter, it had some good bits and i like the sound of this william (though i am a complete sirius fan myself :P). I like the character you've created in violet though i hope she gets over her shyness a bit soon as otherwise not much will happen! ;) lily xxAuthor's Response: hello again! oh my days, thank you so much for all the reviews! you've made me smile a whole heap. I'm so glad you like Violet i thought i'd put a twist on the perfect girls that are in lots of the storys these days. && DONT WORRY, her shyness will disapate, soon. i hope ;) Rosexx Report Review
Hello again :) sick of me yet? You will be soon! I like the fact that you let the reader get to know the character before the action starts, it's good. Noticed a few mistakes again but nothing bad just thought i'd let you know :) will read more soon! Really enjoying this so far, am about to favorite it! :) Lily xxAuthor's Response: oh my days another review! I'M NOT SICK OF YOU:o thank you so much!! :)) thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou (Y) xxx Report Review
Hey :) very good again! Not got much to say i just know how annoying it is when no1 reviews :) :L Lily xxAuthor's Response: ahha this made me laugh:) why thank you! i know gee it makes me so sad:( but ahh well. xx Report Review
Hey :) well this seems like a really good start! I soo want to know what happens next! You're good at writing but maybe you should read your chapter over before you post or get some1 else to because there were some grammar/spelling mistakes that i noticed. That said though i'm pretty sure mine is worse because i never read stuff over before i post :S :) going on to next chappie now! Lily xxAuthor's Response: hey inspiredl:') ahh i know it's my major issue, i'm currently working my way round to fixing all of the grammar and spelling issues, i just need to find the will power which is currently lacking ;)
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There is a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes here, like Remus's name. You kept on calling him Reamus. Don't worry about it, I do it all the time. Most of the mistakes seemed like an accidental thing, kind like the stuff I do. Just try to read it over a few times, even read it out loud. That is what I do. That way you can catch most of the accidental stuff your mind rejected while typing :D
I love your story though! Its cute! A nice muarader one. I definitely love Violet, she sounds like an awesome Gryffindor. Keep up the great work!Author's Response: h innocentdreamers:) i am in the process of fixing all the grammar and spelling mistakes, im just taking my time about it because i hate proof-reading my work ;) ahhahha.
thank you so much lovely:) i love Violet too because she is the epitome of normal ;) Report Review
I really love this story! It's not overly clique, and has some unique characters like Jemima that I really love :) I absolutely loathe Bree though(she's EVIL!!!), I really hope Violet goes badass on her and she gets what's coming 2 her!!! Update quick :DAuthor's Response: Hello daydreamer25 :) thank you so much for the lovely review! ahh dito Bree is annoying me too /: i will, the next chapters almost written! x Report Review
this chapter repeats itself, just so you know. It ends at "irrevocably alone" and then the next sentence is about how she can't get back to sleep. you must have copied and pasted it twice.Author's Response: ohhh thank you, i'm in the mix of major editing at the moment the chapter i'm viewing because i've edited all of them just ends with:
'I couldnât move forward with the same regal distain presented by Jemima, and listening to the happy, nonsense chatter surrounding me I couldnât help but feel, incredibly, irrevocably alone.' with nothing below it :s
but thank you for informing me. Report Review
I really like the story so far but theres just one thing that needs a little fixing. Remus doesn't have an a in it, you've spelt it Reamus. Just a handy hint :) looking forward to reading more :)Author's Response: Hiii shortplatforms, thank you, thank you.
All those things have been fixed up but the other chapters are waiting validation:) but thank you for telling me! Report Review
AMAZING! I love Violet, she's really realistic and REAL! She's not some impossibly amazing, person, she has faults and that's really great to see and nice to read and relate to. Stupid Quidditch team, they should totally apologise. A lot. :) Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter! Good Luck with the rest of the story.Author's Response: hi Gen. thank you for the lovely review, it made me smile. big time.
ahha i know i read these storys and i get jealous of the girls who can sing, dance, look beautiful all the time... i thought i'd would be nice to show a real girl :)
thank you so much! Report Review
Hi there! Okay first off, love the banner, it amazing! just sayin. Anway, i also really like you story. i decide to read the whole story before commenting! Dont ake this the wrong way but you might want to check our spelling in a ew areas. i know i always have to! but then i no it really hard for me to find all my mistakes! i love your style of writting by te way, is awesome and made me want to continue to read the story! post up soon!
jXsAuthor's Response: awhh thank you:) i was thinking about replacing it but i won't now. I'm so happy you took the time to read all of it, i got a wee bit worried over the last few chapters that readers would begin to cba with it.
ohh spelling. ahahah always sucked at it;) and i tend to write at night which is a bad idea too, ahahah thanks for the advice i will go back and check it out later when i have some time.
awhhh thank you *grins* means alot that you like my writing style.
i will, just focusing on my other story, 'cooties' at the mo, but i will update as soon as inspiration hits me for this current story;)
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I wish Bree would go and jump off some high tower! I seriously don't like her, and William best stop being a prat and tell her to back off too!
Apart from my annoyance at Bree, I really loved this chapter, James ranting and Violet and William asleep on the couch, very sweet!
Please don't take long on a up date!
Bye bye xx.Author's Response: ahah, neither do I, Bree isnt the best of people now is she? ;) ahh William, well i guess he's just the typical type of teenage boy.
awhh than you LadyCullen94;) i'm glad you liked it. i wasnt so sure about introducing James as a slightly crazyyy character in this chapter, and i thought it was about time i added in some more loveey, dovy stuff between Violet and William.
I'll update as soon as i can. I'm a wee bit lost with where to take the story, but i'm already halfway through the next chapter
wait... shes still on the team, right? im a little confused... what ever, cant wait for an update, it will probably be explained more there. great chapter though! =]Author's Response: don't worry. im confusing myself with this story at the moment. but i will def explain everything later:)
But you'll find out for certain if she is still on the team in the next chapter.
THANK YOU AGAIN FOR THE REVIEW NAFLOWER05 :)
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Hurry hurry hurry!! I wanna read more :)Author's Response: thank you Black n Wright :) i will dont worry
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specially this chapter, i like how you see James Rant
and go slightly mad instead of the image of perfection
projected onto him.Author's Response: thanks staryyeyed,
i was wondering
do you know the song that your screen name is named after?;) brilliant song... Report Review
good chapter! still want to know how Violet and Bree became frineds, but all in due time i suppose. update soon please!Author's Response: hey Naflower05 thanks for the review. Don't worry. i took your advice and soon enough you will find out, just in a few chapters;)
the next chapter is already in validation, and should *cross fingers* be up today:)
so much bad stuff to happen in one day!
well done on the story:]Author's Response: hahha i know.
i was a bit worried it was wayy to much.
thanks for the review
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the story overall is very good & different.
this chapter was a bit bitty as you said.
but i suppose every story has a chapter like that.
updatesoonish.Author's Response: thanks.
im thinking i should re-edit this chapter.
you are right:)
thanks for the feedback!
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