oh that was so sad but great at the same time; i loved it!

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad that you loved it. I have a sequel out that happens at the wedding. You should read it and tell me what you think.


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hi there!

I just want to say that I really enjoyed reading this. It was very sad and angsty, and I really relished on it, because not everyone can right a sad story like this and succeed.

I think we've all had a moment in our lives when we felt rejection such as this. Even though you make it poetic, the truth is that this sort of situation isn't beautiful; it's raw in the most deep sense, and no words can truly convey how the person feels. But that is what makes this story amazing. Your sheer use of irony amazes me.

Teddy is in love with another girl, yet Victoire is still in love with him. I never expected this twist, so I felt sorry for her. You wrote her very well, and I expect some more Teddy/Victoire in the future!

On a side note, I've noticed that your dialog was sort of...off? I guess?

For instance:

After you made a person speak, you put down a period, like this:

"Victoire." he said.

Doing that makes it a fragment. Victoire isn't a sentence, and neither is 'he said'. If you just put a comma there, everything will run smooth.

I really enjoyed this story and am definitely adding it to my favorites. Very good job!

Author's Response: 'Ello!

This review makes me smile. :) I'm so glad that you enjoyed this, and that you believed I succeed. That truly makes me feel happy.

I like being ironic. I feel like even though it has happened to everyone at some point, sometimes you just need to show people that you understand how they feel. No matter how much it hurts you to do so.

Thank you, I am very glad that you feel I wrote Victoire well. I have a story in mind for her, and I believe I am falling in love with the idea. But I have to finish off one of my other stories before I start it. But I did write another song fic, about Teddy/Victoire. I'm not sure it is as good as this one, because I truly love this one-shot. Hehe.

I will be writing more Teddy/Victoire in the future.

Thank you, I will fix that right away.

Thank you for the amazing review.
Maria

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