I love the repetition between them both of them saying they hate each other but both secretly loving each other at the same time.
Pansy seems in termoil with her emotions about Draco and Theodore as she loves both of them which makes seem more human than is portrayed in the books. The idea of her loving Nott in the past and wanting him to notice her is interesting too as you can't help but wonder that Pansy got the wrong man.
The conversation between them also conveys the extent of their relationship, they're close but know they can't get too close even if they do know everything about each other. I find it really sweet.
I think you're doing really well with this and I like the plot. Feel free to re-request the next chapters
GinevraMollyPotterAuthor's Response: Thank you for the feedback, once again. I really appreciate your comments. The story ends in the next two chapters, but I've been considering picking it back up, and I think that I might just write another set. Thank you again and I will rerequest ^_^ Report Review
This chapter is really lovely :D
At first I was a bit confused as to who actually was speaking but as it went on I obvuiously gathered that it was Nott however it may help if you put maybe at the beginning that it actually is Nott speaking.
The fact that Notts in love with Pansy is one of those things which the reader is like awwh they would be so much better together so I actually do want to see what you do with them in future chapters.
I love how he's also so knowing to the whole situation with her and Draco by automatically knowing that it was Pansy but also even about the situation. It shows the reader how much he actually cares!
GinevraMollyPotterAuthor's Response: Thank you for the feedback. After Pansy/Harry, Pansy/Nott is one of my favorites ^_^ Report Review
This chapter is so emotional!
I feel so sorry for Pansy having to find out about Draco's affair in such a crude way, the fact that her house had been violated by them being together.
The fact that she's playing the what if's around in her head really give a sense of the fact that Pansy is the same as any other woman dwelling on what if rather than what happened. It adds more humanity to her personality.
Going through Draco's history also help us understand the background to the situation and why Pansy thinks she should have known better which helps the reader sympathise with her.
It's interesting that she goes to Nott's house though making the reader possibly speculate if there was something more going on than just a friendship but it seems unlikely after Pansy's reaction to Draco cheating.
I really like this chapter 9/10 :D
GinevraMollyPotterAuthor's Response: Oh wow, thank you I don't know if you've ever heard the song my Demi Lovato, but I had it on repeat while I was writing this. Emotion is something that I feel like I have a problem with, so hearing that the emotion got though means a lot to me! Report Review
I really like the way you write :o oh god! Hope you write a sequel or something because I really want to keep reading! I mean there's not a lot of these stories out there - about the Slytherins - which is why I'm glad you've written this! Btw, you totally deserve much more review than you've got!Author's Response: It's actually really easy to write with a lot of the Slytherin characters because JKR doesn't give us too much of their personality, nor does she give much insight to how they think. I'm planning on a sequel to this story so keep a look out. I really appreciate your comments! =D Report Review
I like your portrayal of Theo! I think this story is great so far, bit exciting :) I can somehow feel with the characters, which is great. Well, off to the next chapter!Author's Response: I love that you wrote that! I have a hard time keeping characters believable and I'm glad that I got it right this time. :heart: Report Review
I think it's a good start. I like your descriptions, your style of writing, it's really emotional. That's good. I also think it's an interesting idea for a story! Lol gonna read the next one nowAuthor's Response: Thanks. I just started writing and this is just what happened... I really appreciate your comments =D Report Review
Very short, but very,very well done! Amazing story, I look forward to reading the next few chapters when I have time!
KatelynnAuthor's Response: Thanks! I look forward to hearing from you again. Report Review
Rose(:Author's Response: Thanks, I'm really glad that you like it ^_^ Report Review
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