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Review #1, by collette michelle Her eyes.

29th March 2010:
WOW! That was powerful Emma, like seriously!

I have never really read much Bellatrix, or even that of the Longbottoms. Never have a read or even heard of a story directly about their torture. You were certainly able to capture the power and show the impact of a moment so. drastic.

The repetition of the 'I don't know', be it the words or just the thoughts of not knowing, from Frank as he was being tortured was full of feeling. Did that make sense? je ne sais pas!

Like I have told you far to much, your descriptions an imagery are amazing! I could literally feel the pain faced by Frank as the curse shook through his body! From beginning to end, you showed strong narration and descriptions that were just as powerful as everything else.

This was a real treat to read.
xx.
Collette

Author's Response: Collette! -hugs- I'm actually really surprised that this hasn't been done before - I mean, if you went really deeply into the torture it would be possible that it wouldn't be HPFFable, but that's not necessary, so...I'd think there was more about the torture. We get so much about Alice in particular being insane...oh well. Glad to do something out of the ordinary!

I think it made sense - I'm not making sense today, so I can hardly reprimand you not not making sense. I really struggle with description, so I'm glad you think it's good. I do think it's improving! Gah, this review is just amazing and I don't know how to do it justice.

Thank you so so so so so much.

- emma xx


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Review #2, by Margravine Her eyes.

1st February 2010:
Emma, apologies first off for taking so long with this -hides-

To the review:
SCARY banner. Eeexcellent. The beginning is very good, although I would suggest dropping the '-', I just felt it slowed the pace down a tad. I love the Longbottoms, and I love that you chose this to write about, it is very emotive and heartbreaking. The eye repetition was completely haunting as well, your ending is inspired.

I stalked the reviews and must gasp YOU WROTE THIS IN TWENTY MINUTES? Tis rather fabulous for a twenty minute job! I can spend that long on a difficult sentence! I would however, think about expanding it a little, there are some bits, like Bella's loss of her path that are perfectly sufficient as they are, but could be fleshed out more :). Cardinal rule: try to show as much as you can instead of telling. You have very clean, succinct prose so you won't get bogged down in run on sentences of irrelevant description like I do =(

It was very easy to step into Franks POV, I particularly like the homey little touches like 'Was that the table they had received last Christmas'. It was a very sad, very emotional piece, and for such a small amount of words, that is simply amazing. Well done :)

Author's Response: I fail epically at responding to reviews. D: I really do. But it's only 'cause I don't know what to say!

Thank you so much for this review, Jo! I'll look into the flow of it, thank you muchly for pointing it out. It does appear I like the Longbottoms - I have three pieces in which a Longbottom (namely Frank) is a character, which was totally unintentional but whatever. XD

It was a belated entry for the Stream of Consciousness challenge and I assume with stream of consciousness one doesn't take too long with it, as you can only write for as long as you have something to write about. XD If I've totally got the wrong idea, tell me. Given it's not an actual entry for the challenge (which didn't allow editing), I'll look into your suggestions with expansion - that's always one of my major problems, not expanding enough. D: I have v. irrelevant description and run-on sentences normally, just not for this piece. xD And I must disagree on your writing anyway - it's amazing. :P

I did enjoy writing this very much - I love Frank, I must go into him more at a later date, methinks - and I'm so glad you liked it!

xx emma.


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Review #3, by Rose_Weasley123 Her eyes.

27th January 2010:
Emma, this was amazing.

I cannot believe you wrote this in 20 minutes. You are a freaking wonder woman. (I still remember your 10k in a day for NaNo).

I need to be getting to bed, so this shall not be long, but I loved this. The descriptions were WONDERFUL- they all flowed really well, and nothing felt over or under done.

The plot was delicious- I never thought I'd say that about a torture scene, but it was. I could feel the emotions really clearly, and it was excruciating in the best possible way to read. What I mean is- I didn't want it to end like it did (even though I knew it would) but I couldn't look away.

The characters were excellent. Frank was AMAZING. I could really identify with him- which takes skill, considering WHAT I am meant to be identifying with.

Sorry for this rambling, really.

Point is, I LOVED IT.

-Becca x

Author's Response: Goodness, Becca, your review still makes me blush! I don't think it's very deserving of all your praise, but thank you muchly! 10k in a day isn't really that much if you seriously think about it - if it's a weekend, then it shouldn't take you that long. XD But yeah, it was... an interesting day. anyway.

I'm so glad you like this so much, because, as you pointed it, it was written in a terribly short period of time. I looove Frank - I've actually now written three stories to do with him, one at school, this one, and then one in St. Mungo's. XD

- emma xx


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Review #4, by amy Her eyes.

27th January 2010:
this is a sad and beatiful story i loved it

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^_^

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