I've always been curious as to how Bellatrix's first meeting with Voldemort went, and I think that this is a great take on it. What really impresses me is how you took lyrics from a song like Amazing Grace--it's a hymn, after all--and fit them to a story about Bellatrix Black and Death Eaters, and the lyrics did fit in perfectly.
The only thing that confused me a little was that I'd have expected Bellatrix to have known who Voldemort was--though it's only an assumption I've had, and it would fit with the purebloods and characterizations just fine if, especially in the early days, which I assume this is, most of the Death Eaters' doings was kept a secret from the purebloods' children.
I like how you have the Blacks nearly middle-class at this point in time--I've always considered them to be unfailingly rich, but I can very much see them falling slowly. Your description of the scenario, mostly Bellatrix, is spot-on and perfectly written.
I liked this! I always enjoy reading about Bellatrix, especially when she's younger, and this is no exception. :) 9/10Author's Response: I love things like that- where it's something very innocent and it becomes twisted to darkness. It's kind of like when people use nursery rhymes as dark story titles.
I can see why you would wonder about that, but I guess I decided that this was the VERY beginning of his reign. I just wanted to try something new. I'm glad that you liked the fall of the Blacks. It was something that I hadn't really considered before, and it was fun to play with.
Thank you so much for your review! I really enjoy Bella as well. Sometimes it's fun to play with the nutters ;) Report Review
Nice little idea of how she became such a faithful follower. Good job :)Author's Response: Thank you so much :) Report Review
Oh, wow. This was great. I love how you took the song and managed to make it creepy, to twist it into Bella's kind of "lost" and "found". -shudder- I like how you didn't have the cliche "Bella kicks butt" bit, either; you had her somewhat scared, and they took her wand. And then the ending... I love that, how you've shown when she started following Voldemort. Amazing.(:
-JasmineAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I've been listening to "Amazing Because It Is" by the Almost a lot, and that's got an excerpt of "Amazing Grace" in it, so it just kind of hit me. I really wanted to give a reason for her unfaltering faith in Voldemort. Thanks for your review. I always enjoy hearing from you :) Report Review
First of all, can I just say that you sent shivers down my back. So much of this was really, really great. You could of made this comedic, you know, with the dirty minded men surrounding her and she kicking their butts or something. But, instead, you took it another direction, kept the same situation but changed the connotation, and oh! It really worked. First off, instead of them being “dirty-minded” in the cliché sexual sense, you made them dirty in that Bella thought they were because of their blood status. Bravo for the creativity there! Also, the juxtaposition between the hymn and the story was eerie! I also enjoyed your characterization of Bella, how that she was always kind of a loyal follower and she just didn’t change one day, allegiance maybe but not as a person. First she adores her father and does his bidding and when she meets a more deity-like figure, she follows him. Wow! Really wow! It is also very well written. And more over, you took the scenario, adopted it to make it your very own and perfectly fitting with the HP world, made it dark and ran with it. In essence, you did exactly what I asked you to do, and did it magnificently! Bravo! 12/10!
-FannyPriceAuthor's Response: Thank so much! I knew I could have gone for the comedy, but it's hard for me to take that path when it comes to Bella. She's just one of those characters that demands I take her seriously. Thank you so much! I've recently been listening to the song "Amazing Because It Is" and it really got the song stuck in my head (obviously not that version, though). Thank you so, so much! I really like exploring Bella's character. I love finding the reason behind her madness. Thanks so much for your kind review :) Report Review
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