Well written, but I can't say that I liked the ending, since it turned to be a Hr/R story and not a Hr/V story for which I came to read this story for. There nothing more annoying than Hermione thinking of Ron while kissing Viktor. Sorry, but I really dislike that. Report Review
awww, so adorable! i like this idea a lot--writing on a first kiss--and thought you pulled it off very well. i can definitely picture Hermione's character acting this way in reaction. it is very plausible, as was the entire story. amazing job! (: Report Review
Awesome job! I loved the end how Hermione was thinking about how she would have rather kissed Ron. This story was very believable and I could totally see Hermione's first kiss and relationship with Krum happening exactly like this.Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! :D Report Review
That was really good. I really liked it because I had a really bad first kiss encounted and I could relate. This was very good. Haha. And well written. 10/10! :)Author's Response: Thank you :D I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
I loved this story! Well written, and I loved the characterization of Victor and Hermione. The Amortenia for Animals bit had me laughing.Author's Response: Hahah XD That was definitely fun to write. Thanks for reading! Report Review
Adorable. Completely deserving of its awards. I'm in love with it! Excellent job, the images, description, and utter feeling are amazing. 10/10.Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review :D Report Review
Another great story! And here is your homage to Hr/Ron. You allude to it but we don't have to suffer through experiencing much of it.Author's Response: LOL so true. I actually did end up writing a a R/Hr fic... only because it was forced upon me in a challenge. I'm so not a fan but I think I handled it well here :P Report Review
I absolutely love Viktor and you made him very in character. Your style of writing is both: interesting and flawless. You gave Viktor a normal personality instead of making him a sex god or a total looser.
I liked that Hermione has a rational reason to choose Ron and you gave that reason in a subtle way, not ten tons of bricks over reader's head!
I feel a little sorry for Viktor, because he was such a nice guy and a gentleman to that and Hermione preferred someone else. Ron was a prick to leave Patil girl like he did and he was still the one 'wanted'.Author's Response: Thanks so much for the awesome feedback. I'm very fond of the story because I think it's amongst the best character work I've done. And there's something quintessentially innocent about it which I enjoyed :D Report Review
Really like this! Especially the last line =PAuthor's Response: Haha thanks! :D Report Review
Haha, that was very amusing. I really like the way you write; in this one-shot, the voice you used was completely, 100% Hermione's. So great job! 10/10Author's Response: Thanks so much :D I'm thrilled because I was really happy with the narrative voice in this as well... sometimes she's easier to write than other times. One never knows :P Report Review
That was very good. I loved how you were able to get into Hermione's head and tell the story from her point of view AND stay true to her character. Your choice of words was spot on for her. I got the same vibe I got when I read Hermione in the series. I thank you for that because most of the time people have a tendency to make her sound a tad too ditzy for our bookish Hermione (though she could sometimes be quite helpless especially when it concerns something that's got nothing to do with books). And the part when they nearly kissed and she wished that she should have read a book or two about it? Classic Hermione!
I also liked how you approached Hermione's feelings towards Ron, how you didn't make it too mushy or too obvious and how you communicated the frustration/irritation/helplessness she must have felt towards his obliviousness.
My favorite scene/lines:
Explaining one's need for Volume III: Amortentia for Animals would be difficult to explain. Not simply because of the absurd content it undoubtedly held, but because of the embarrassing implication that she had read volumes one and two.
The reason why I liked it so much is because it's the kind of sense of humour that I perceive Hermione would have. I daresay this is something that could have been lifted out of the books. An outtake/spin-off, perhaps? So in terms of sticking with canon and characterization, you did a great job.
And I loved Viktor, too. He's adorable in this!
Technically, I have no issues. Your grammar and punctuations were perfect, which is also one of the reasons why I have nothing but praises for you.
Thank you so much for requesting a review because I thoroughly enjoyed this. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely and in depth review! I have no idea where the idea of this came from but I really love writing Hermione, I find her natural humour hilarious so the fact that you found her to be well characterised really makes me happy :)
Thanks again for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
Hey, your review as promised!
I love it! :D. My full beta-like review is available if you'd lik it :)
~RaynAuthor's Response: Thank you for reviewing :) Report Review
Absolutely lovely. You nailed Hermione's character :)Author's Response: Thank you, Eve! I had a lot of fun with this story :D Report Review
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