wow. This story is absolutely amazing. I just read it from front to back in one sitting. Your writing has improved so much since the beginning when it was already great. You made an amazing story that didn't only center around Kiersten and James and I think that's truly great. There was so much to this story that I just couldn't stop reading. I loved how you put that they became animagus and how you talked about her family issues because not everyone can come from a perfect family. And I love how you talked about her friends and graduation and everything. It was truly a really fantastic story.Author's Response: I'm so, so glad you enjoyed this! Thank you for reading, you're the best!:) Report Review
some of the words seem to be wrong... instead of hair- ears and instead of eyes- puppies? unless im being thick, its a good story but hard to understand because of random wordsAuthor's Response: Idk if you have a weird ad pop-up situation? I looked back and I don't see the word puppy at all...I hope it doesn't distract you from reading too much! Report Review
I positively adore this story. It has to be one of my favorite stories on this site. I love all of the characters and the plot and everything! Whenever I am having a bad day or I am just very bored I always read through my favorite parts of this story and it just makes everything better. So I guess thank you for writing this story.Author's Response: THANK YOU!!! That was such a nice compliment, you have no idea:) I miss this story too, it was so easy to write, no matter what. I miss some of the characters too. So thank you for reviewing, it means a lot! Report Review
Zachery goode ?? Have u read the gallagher books?? :)Author's Response: No haha everyone asks me that! One of these days I actually will read them...thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
U should change the spacing so that it isnt so far apart and when reading it doesnt need to be scrolled every few wordsAuthor's Response: Yeees, but my computer spazzes a lot for some annoying reason, and it can be hard for formatting on this site. I've tried to fix it before, sorry None, it doesn't always work. Thanks for the lovely review!!! Report Review
heyyy i just wanna say that this fanfict by far my most favourite JamesII/OC ever.
i love Keri, i love she has the girl power without being stupid, like most fanfict OC elsewhere.
and i LOVE JAMES. i know having family whose being famous didn't mean he is an arsee XO
and Dommy and everyone else and being good development too. because world is just not around you.
thank you far making such a great fanfiction :)
Luna ^,^Author's Response: Yaay! I don't think it's the best JamesII/OC fanfiction out there though, this story needs A LOT of work before it could even come close to being up there with some of the greats.
But nevertheless, thank you for reviewing! I'm happy you love James and Dom, I loved writing them too! As for Dom though, I'm not sure if she ever realizes fully that the world doesn't revolve around her. She's a very very self-centered person! I'm happy you liked this as much as you did:) Check out some of my other stuff! Report Review
I loved your fanfic! I really enjoyed reading it and I think I became really attached to your characters (specially to Kiersten). Up to now, it's the best one I've read and I hope you keep writing, because you are excellent at it. : )Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's great to know that a whole year after I finished this story people are still reading it. I loved these characters too, they were a part of my life for so long! I think there are bits and pieces of Kiersten in my other stories just because I can't help but add her qualities into them. Check out some of my other stories, and thanks for reviewing:) Report Review
I really enjoyed this story and the ending how you wrapped it all up concluding all of the characters.Author's Response: Aww I'm glad you liked! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This was an amazing story!
I loved Dom. Her personality was hilarious.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked:) I loved Dom too, she was my favorite character to write. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
OH MY GOD(RIC)! That is the most adorable thing, EVER!
Yes, I know I havn't reviewed since the 1st chappie, but this is still one of my favourite NG stories. It's just so bleeping amazing! PLEASE write a sequal, or if not, a short-story collection of moments of their life together!
Again, bloody terrific story! Sometimes it made me LSHMSFOaIDMT!!! (Laugh so hard my sombrero falls off and i drop my taco)
KEEP WRITING :D
Shay_GryffAuthor's Response: Aww thank you! I'm glad that you liked:) I still don't think I'm going to write a sequel or anything else with this story, I'm sorry! It's just I feel like the story's already been told. Thanks for reviewing!! Report Review
Wow! I normally don't update until the end of a story, but this is really good! I'm already hooked! Very few NG stories have the same amount of attention grabbing skills as this until at least the third chapter. You obviouldy have some talented writing skills in you. Good for you!
Anyhoo, it's impresive that your story made me review in chapter one. I hope you understand how rare that is and don't underthink it. Good job!
KEEP WRITING :D
Shay_GryffAuthor's Response: aww thank you! That means a lot:) Report Review
- CAPITALS on Professor, Madam etc., (All titles)
- It's H-O-G-S-M-E-A-D-E not H-O-G-S-M-E-A-D. Honestly. You should get an admin to check for this stuff!!Author's Response: Okay anonymous. I'm sorry that my spelling is terrible, but you're the one who's reading my story. No one told you you had to. I appreciate you giving me a lesson here, but as I've said in many reviews just like yours I've got to go back and EDIT. I do improve, in fact I'm a grammer freak now. Understand? You're probably the twentieth person to say the same old thing. I get it. Sadly there's more in my life than HPFF. One day, when I'm old and lifeless, I will go back and edit all of this story. Right now, however, I just don't have the time to do so. So, I appologize for the spelling mistakes and the capitalization mistakes once again. I promise that by the end of the story I can actually write. This story is poorly written, I don't have a problem saying it. I was young when I started. It was my first story, and if you write you should understand this. I just hope next time you review you can do it based on my improvement. Thank you for reviewing. Report Review
Really great story line, I'm really enjoying it :D BUT, there are a lot of grammatical and HP-related mistakes (i.e Oclomency is actually Occulemency) and you really need to properly capitalize things. If you fix these little things I'd give your story an 11/10 !!Author's Response: I know I wrote all of this a really long time ago now, I was around fourteen I think? I've got to go back and edit. I will sometime soon! Report Review
did you notice that you keep spelling "bite" as "bight"?Author's Response: I know I've got to go back and fix that! Report Review
I think that this was a brilliant chapter! It wasn't too fast because all through the past few chapters, you had it building up to this! Well done!Author's Response: No if I could go back I would break up the whole get together into about three or four chapters, but I don't really have the energy to change that much haha. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
THIS STORY IS TOO GOOD. i congratulate you on your fantastic writing abilities!Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I'm glad that you like:) Report Review
This chapter is hilarious. Your work is so much fun to read!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I like the story a lot. However, your grammar and misspellings are killing me. "through" instead of "threw"? It's a bit of proof reading would helpAuthor's Response: I know I've got to proofread. Report Review
Interesting... I like the content a lot. However, the grammar problems are a bit distractingAuthor's Response: Glad you like! I know I've got to go back and fix the grammar issues. Report Review
OMG I'm crying so much right now!! Brilliant story! Brilliant plot! Brilliant characters! Brilliant writing!
Can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Thanks so much:) I'm happy that you liked this story. Check out my others, maybe you'll feel the same? Regardless, I'm glad you enjoyed! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Yay! They finally slept together! Great chapter all around:)Author's Response: Yayayaaay! Haha thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Ok first of all I love your story. I've been reading it nonstop since last night (just a couple of hours). I love HPFF and abuse stories and love stories so this is like the trifecta for me!
Also this is one of my favorite chapters! It kept me laughing that she just spurts out that she loves James. Their relationship is the cutest because they're just friends with the extra benefits you get with dating someone.
I know this story's done but please write more! You're such an amazing writer!Author's Response: I write a lot more! I've got multiple stories that need updating, just not this one:) I'm content with where it ended. Thanks for reviewing! I'm happy you enjoyed! Report Review
Great story, but there's some spelling mistakes. You might want to proofread before you post the chapterAuthor's Response: I know I've got to go back and edit. It gets better as it goes on, I promise! Report Review
its amazing :)) I'm really tall too so felt like i was her :) And i really hate being tall sometimes but when i read this i felt better:) Keep on writing !!Author's Response: See, I'm really short, so I can't relate:( I'm glad it made you feel better though! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
This story was so beautiful!I loved it!Keep up the good
writing!:)Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked this! Report Review
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