I read the reviews to make sure that this was really about Percy and Penelope. There was a moment when I guessed, you were writing about all those siblings and well, Percy is the one Weasly to break up with his girlfriend for his career.
But even though I was never sure who this story was about, I loved it. This is beautifully written and made me feel very sad. I like the point of view you use, first one but addressed to someone who is not mentioned by name. Very well done!Author's Response: I didn't want to make the actual characters too important to the story itself -- I definitely had Percy and Penelope in mind when I wrote it, and there are definitely clues, but I don't think it's important. I'm very glad you enjoyed it! That makes me so happy to hear. I would apologise for making you feel sad, but...I suppose that was sort of the point, so it means I've done my job well. Thanks for the lovely review! Report Review
Good story. Definitely left me with a sense sadness and longing. Really well written!Author's Response: Gosh, thank you for the lovely review! Report Review
Emma, love. Hello!
This was beautifully, truly it was my dear. You wrote the heartbreak Penelope well, you could feel her sorrow for how her relationship with Percy ended and all things leading up to it. You wrote her beautifully. She really came to life in this, as both a person and some who loves/cares for someone.
The lack of dialogue works well, granted I am biased because I love stories without it. I feel it shows a certain talent of the writer if they can pull off a story without it and show the characters well. The first person is also wonderful. That is something that a lot miss the mark when attempting, but not you love. Not you!
This was heartbreakingly beautiful, really! Brilliant job! Now I am off to read more!
ColletteAuthor's Response: Collette! All these reviews from you! I'm eternally endebted, you know. I'm going to do the same thing to you - but perhaps not all of them quite yet because you have 25 and that is a lot. I've only given that many reviews on this account, so... perhaps one day. :P Anywho! I adore Penelope - she is such an interesting character in that we know nothing about her except that she was Percy's girlfriend and a Ravenclaw Prefect. There's interesting analysis of her name on the lexicon, and I would love to dabble with the implications of it one day, though she would be a COMPLETELY different character to the Penelope here.
I also love stories without dialogue - it's such a pain to write, and I love the atmosphere the lack of it gives a story. You give me too much praise! But I adore you, and I promise to review as soon as I can. Not sure when that will be, but during these easter holidays most definitely. -loves-
- emma xx Report Review
Interesting choice for a story. I had always wondered what people thought of their relationship... and you certainly delivered a good perspective on it.
-IcaAuthor's Response: Why thank you, love! I do enjoy writing stories that aren't always the most popular characters/pairings, and I'm glad that I did a good job in your opinion. :D Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
Here with your review! ^_^
Oh, goodness, that was beautiful. The dialog was very sparse (actually, was there ANY dialog?), but, in my opinion, that made it better. The description you use is just to die for. Even though there was no/little speaking, I really had a sense of what was going on. Nice job.
Percy/Penelope is not TERRIBLY obvious, but I still knew it was them. In lots of stories, authors will say "Percy said this to his lover, Penelope," but you kind of implied it more than said it. I actually liked that about it. Though the story was not shouting Percy/Penelope, it still had a Percy/Penelope... vibe (if that makes any sense...).
Really, really enjoyed it, my dear. Definitely a very well-written one-shot. Thanks for requesting!
- RinAuthor's Response: ...can I go run around the block screaming about how amazing this review is? XD I suppose the local council wouldn't be happy with me disturbing the quiet neighbourhood... anywho, thank you so much for this! There was dialogue in the sense that Penelope said, 'you said you needed to get good grades for NEWTs', etc., but no actual direct speech. I always thought myself really bad at description, so... this review is either lying or I've been disillusioned all this time. XD
I thought it was alrightishly obvious that it was Percy, and we don't hear of him having any other girlfriends in school (he's a bit uptight, isn't he?) so I'll make it a bit more obvious that it's Penelope by adding in a post-basilisk scene, but I'm glad you knew who it was. ^_^ I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thank you once again for the lovely review! Report Review
I really loved this! Your writing was absolutely beautiful and the whole thing flowed wonderfully and was just so enjoyable to read. I really liked how you didn't mention the characters' names (even if it did take me a while to realise who they were - I only twigged when the part about all his siblings came along xD). But I thought it worked really well because it added an air of mystery, and made me want to keep reading all the more because I wanted to find out who the couple were.
Both Percy and Penelope were written brilliantly - I thought that the first person added a lot to Penelope's portrayal and allowed us to see her from a really interesting angle, and all the mentions of Percy like him blushing when he asked her out and dumping her for grades and how he would have told her off for shirking her duties were all wonderfully in-character.
Anyway, a definite 10/10, and something new for my favourites list :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! It makes me feel all fuzzy inside to read this review - I don't think I've ever heard my writing called beautiful before! I'm going to make it a little more obvious that it's Penelope in an edit at some point - but mentioning names takes all the fun out of things. :P
I'm so glad I succeeded in characterisations - we get a very clear picture of Percy in canon, so I wanted to stick to that. Eeeep, a favourite! You have no idea how much I love you for reviewing. Report Review
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