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Review #1, by amy Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

27th January 2010:
i really liked your story

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Review #2, by lunarocks14 Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

25th January 2010:
well. interesting? well, cute, sad, sweet. poor james.

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Review #3, by redherring Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

22nd January 2010:
Oh - my - Rowling. Wow. Just... amazing. Honestly, I completely adored it! Best thing I've read it quite a while, actually. Your writing style is gorgeous and I am utterly, utterly jealous. You can do witty, serious, you can do description and emotions and brilliant characterisation... I'm just a little bit impressed :D

I loved the original feel it had, as well. There aren't a lot of James/Scorpius fics out there and I've definitely never read one before (though I now love the pairing - much more interesting than Albus/Scorpius), and... I don't really know. It just felt a bit different, in a good way. Yes, Lily fancied Scorpius, yes Al was friends with him, but you made it your own and put your own twist on it all and it worked wonderfully. It wasn't just the average teen-angst, Malfoy/Potter one-shot.

James was brilliant. I think I love him, just a little bit. He's a bit like James Potter I, but not too much so, and I could kind of see a bit of Ginny in him as well. I also liked the mention of him having kissed a few boys in his time, because it made everything that happened between him and Scorpius much more realistic and believable. It wasn't Scorpius who turned him, as such, he'd had those feelings before.

Oh, and Scorpius sounds gorgeous, which never hurts anything x)

The only problem I have with this (and it isn't really a problem as such, just something I couldn't help thinking as I read it) is that the tone at the beginning is completely different to that of the middle and the end. The beginning was lighter and funnier and James was bigger and bolder and had that sarcastic edge to him, and then when it got into the present tense section there was all that beautiful description, and James's thoughts were deeper and the tone was more serious. I adored both styles of writing, but I do feel that they are very different styles and to me they don't seem to fit together very well.

I don't know if you did it intentionally so as to show the development and change in James's character, but it didn't really come across that way - maybe because the first bit was in past tense and so seemed like a memory (I'm guessing that was intentional?), but it didn't really feel like present-tense-James looking back at his younger self, it just felt like the thoughts of that younger self as they were happening. Maybe if it was all present tense and divided up into sections, it would show the passing of time better? Gahh, I hope I'm making sense. Sorry if this is just one long ramble but I am trying to be helpful and constructive, honest ;)

Overall, though, fantastic. I LOVED it, and as soon as I'm done writing this I'll just have to go back and read it all again. So I'll finish here.

Ok, pretty long review. I don't often write them, which really shows just how much I loved this. Maybe write a few more stories so I can squee about them too, yeah? :D Oh, and your first? No way! That's just something else that makes this story utterly awesome and me incredibly jealous. Brilliant stuff. 98756373444/10. And a new one for my favourites list :)

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Review #4, by dracos_hotter Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

22nd January 2010:
Your first? You're kidding. That was spectacular... I particually liked the lack of speech. We were left to sink in James' pain, and it worked. Some fics feel empty without it; your story felt complete.

I like your pairing, too. The opposites were brilliant.

James' rebuttal: harsh but very good to read.

I hope you do well =)

xE

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Review #5, by FredAndGeorgeForever Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

21st January 2010:
Whoah, this is a really good story! You did a great job >.<

10/10 :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I was a bit nervous about it but I'm relieve you thought it was a good story, ha.

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Review #6, by baletgir Destroy and Ruin Everything We Touch

21st January 2010:
Wow, good job. This was really nice to read, and different.
:)BaletGir

Author's Response: Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it XD

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