I really really like it.
I know that it is a little bit presumptuous of me to assume you aren't eleven, but assuming you aren't eleven you write very well from a younger persons point of view. It's very believable. And you are setting up your story very well.
Add another chapter soon please! I'm dying to know more about Molly. Report Review
HI:)its a fabulous start to the story:) it has lodes of potential.
Keep it up because I will be waiting with bated breath for your
Next up date :) Insanely jealous over here;) hahahha
10/10 & of course added to my favourites
xxAuthor's Response: im so sorry the next chapter is almost wrote but i cant remeber where i saved it.
Dont worry its prbally saved on my pen drive but i have to check through eveything so it should be up in the next few days!!! Report Review
So far I like it. You did slip back into third person around the mention of the bunny in the hat. I have the same problem. Mostly write in 3 so I have to be careful when I switch to 1.Author's Response: yay! Thank you so much for the review (you are my first one ever)
I will try to keep that in mind from now one and get someone else to read through it.
Thx for the review
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