Hey, there I really liked this chapter contentwise. I hope that Lacie finally realises she likes Wood too. There are still come minor things in your writing style like times and grammar. But I am sure this will improve with time. So keep up the work and you know what they say...practice makes perfect :)) Report Review
Hey, correct me if I am wrong, but why is part of the first chapter in the second chapter again??? This was very confusing and you should maybe edit that if you have the time.
I still want to continue reading and find out what is going on between Wood and Lacie :)) Report Review
HI! First of all, I just wanted to point out some minor things, not real criticism so please don't take it hard. You sometimes jump from past tense to present tense and it gets confusing after a while, so just pick one tense and stick to it. You also wrote Slytherians instead of Slytherins (but that might have just been a typo). I would suggest you proofread the chapters or get someone to proofread them for you carefully before submitting them.
But now to the good parts. Your story starts out very interesting and I really do want to find out what is going on with Lacie's mom. I like the diary idea and also like that Lacie decided to name the diary (I did that as well :D). And why the hell is Wood being such a stuckup prick?? His last comment was really really harsh and I hope he apologizes for it (even though he doesn't know about Lacie's situation). So far so good :D Off to the next chapter :DAuthor's Response: Thankyou for all of your advice. I really appreciate it. Before I did have someone proofreading it, but right now my school has finals so i rushed to put it up. I will make sure that i review it again soon and try to fix all of the tenses problems. Thankyou very much, and i'm glad that you enjoy it! Report Review
This story looks really good. Can't wait for the next chapterAuthor's Response: Thanks, it will be up as soon as it is validated!!! Thankyou Report Review
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