i loved the story, the way you describe things is awesome and very...magical, lol. the only thing was it says in one spot her father is paralyzed from the waist down but than towards the end he stands up out of his chair. maybe i just got confused but it just seemed awkward to them both happen.
beatriceAuthor's Response: thank you for pointing out this mistake! I will try to fix it as soon as possible! thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Oh, I really liked this first chapter, poor Alyra- I felt so sorry for her... :( I'm not usually into oc stories, but your one caught my eye and I actually really enjoyed it! I loved her imagination about the house being a castle, it was cute, but also had a sad meaning to it too.
Hope you keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that you liked it. I know OC stories are generally less popular than canon but the idea just hit me and...poof! there it was. Thanks again for reviewing! Report Review
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