Jane, this review has been a long time in the coming. Thank you so much for the beautiful story, it's perfect! Are you sure you've never written Snape/Lily before? The pure emotion in this fic is so angsty and wonderful and I love it. Something about it is just so right.
Best present ever!
~SamiAuthor's Response: Oh honestly, Sami! Don't worry about it, lol! I wasn't expecting one at all, so this was a lovely surprise ^_^. I'm SO pleased that you liked this, and I actually loved writing it too. Snape is an AMAZING character and I'm glad other people out there appreciate him.
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That was beautiful. I liked how poetic it was.
I love the way you write. It's very moving and gripping. I've never been much of a Lily/Sev fan in them being anything other but friends, but I really enjoyed this.
My only complaint would be it's a bit on the short side. But don't mind me, I love tales of the Tolkienesque frame. Yet I feel that yours was just as good if only shorter.
Like I said, nice work, this is truly beautiful.Author's Response: Wow! Another lovely review from you! I think my head may begin to swell :P. I'm absolutely flattered that you thought this was a decent read. You seem to have found a way of reviewing the pieces of work I'm least sure of, and it's given me a huge boost.
I'm a huge fan of Severus though XD. I think when it's unrequited it's easier for Lily/James shippers to accept, Lol. You're far too kind!
It IS rather short. It was more of a drabble than a one-shot really, but there's no option for that on HPFF. I'll definitely keep length in mind for future reference though. I have a bit of a problem striking the right balance all the time, so thank you for bringing it up. I don't think I'm quite ready to be compared to Tolkien! Hahaha
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This is quite possibly the loveliest unrequited Snape/Lily I have ever read! As much as I adore that ship, it can get difficult to find good fics dealing with it. Sometimes they can be overdone, or awkward, or whatever else. This was just beautiful. It really brought to life Snape's isolation and loneliness and pining. Definitely one of the best characterizations of Snape I've ever read.
I can has this line please?? - But the fading embers in the fire glow with the vivacity of her hair, and when they die they are the same shade as his.
Actually, there were quite a lot of lines that I loved, but if I began quoting them, I'd be quoting pretty much the whole chapter.
Even though you're writing about this filthy, lonely place, the writing is lyrical and pure. It's an awesome contrast. I love the theme about how "nothing has a chance in Spinner's End." To me, that fits Snape perfectly because I'll bet he always believed he never really had a chance with Lily due to his circumstances. The privileged, well-loved boy got the girl, rather than the impoverished, abused boy.
Just so lovely, evocative, and impeccably written. Favoriting immediately.
MelanieAuthor's Response: That is high praise indeed! I've read a couple myself and I can't help loving how absolutely tragic it is. I think that makes me a bad person XD. I think the trick is not dragging it out to much and first person can probably over-angst it. Although, I went for third because I couldn't write Snape properly in a million years :P. However, I'm glad that you think that Snape still managed to seem believable.
Okays, but only because you started weeping. SNAPE/LILY IS SO SAD. I honestly believe the unrequited Snape/Lily was some of the best material in the series. Truly unbelievable.
You're swelling my head right up, Melanie XD.
Just imagining living there has me depressed. It seems so completely bleak and hopeless and I have no doubt that Snape would have blamed it. The shame with him was that he believed he couldn't change or be anything better.
We're just making each other wail here -laughs through tears-
Okay, so, you're far too nice to me and I'm not quite sure what to say apart from that you are AMAZING. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it ^_^.
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You. Are. Silly.
I shall repeat and repeat until you finally realise it because there is NO reason on this planet why this should ever be called unfit for human eyes or anything similar!
Snape/Lily is underwritten, especially on the unrequited Snapey side. Not a fan of full-blown not-James/Lily, I was a leetle skeptical but with no reason as it was...beautiful.
But the fading embers in the fire glow with the vivacity of her hair, and when they die they are the same shade as his.
By far and away, that was my favourite line. That or the last. It makes him...human and that's an element to Snape that is often foregone, I feel.
No dialogue, naturellement, was brilliant. It's amazing what a difference that can make to a piece and it really sets this off nicely.
Erm, no reason for you to EVER declare yourself jealous of my descriptions again with these. Your vocabulary is far wider than my own and you really work wonders with the words, twisting them and using them brilliantly.
Sooo...I really have little else to say other than to repeat that I think you're a delusional idiot with no capacity to see her own amazing ability, but who will surely call me a hypocrite as soon as she reads this.
xxAuthor's Response: So. Are. You.
I CANNOT JUDGE MY OWN WORK, OKAY? Lol, I think everyone realises how difficult it is to be objective. Unfortunately, we err on the side of disaster.
Hahahaha, a lot of people are saying they're not fans, but I do not know why as Snape is LOVELY. Well, in a way :P. I can't quite understand how underwritten it is though, as the Snape/Lily parts throughout the series were some of the most beautiful, in my humble opinion.
"After all this time, Severus?"
-Jane tears up-
I seem to be a person who manages to get one good line in a fic and people latch onto it. I'm rather lucky really, it blinds them from the rest :P.
I do love stories sans dialogue, they're always nice and prose-y.
NOW THAT IS RIDICULOUS. Your descriptions are absolutely amazing! And your vocabulary far outweighs mine, so we shall not hear any of this nonsense again.
We shall go off and be oblivious to the world together :P
Thank you for reading and reviewing, my love!
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I was drawn to this fic by the title - love Death Cab, btw. ^_^ I love your very distinct characterizations in particular - Snape, dark, a "weed", juxtaposed against Lily's supposed flowery brilliance. It captures insightfully the nature of Snape's feelings for Lily, and what attracted him to her. That last line in particular is so poignantly romantic, and yet heart-rending, especially when placed in a post-DH context. Such a doomed love. -sighs- 10/10Author's Response: I was looking for any excuse to call a story this! I just love it XD. And I completely mauled their name in my disclaimer, but I hope they don't mind :P.
Wow, I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my interpretation of them. In my head, Lily was the sort of person that Snape sort of wished he could be, but he just wasn't. It wasn't in him to be anything more and I suppose that it has a lot to do with his upbringing. I also wanted to contrast his behaviour in this with his death and when he became 'brave' by working as a double agent. It probably would have meant a lot to him.
It was never meant to be was it? It was sort of meant to be unspoken that she didn't feel the same. And it's sad...
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Since I'm not long-winded like you are, this review is going to be short and sweet. Because, let's face it, who doesn't like that?
Considering that I quite possibly one of the biggest, if not THE biggest Lily/James fan, I was quite surprised that I enjoyed this. But maybe it's because they didn't have interaction. Regardless, it was beautifully written and there were some really great lines that took my breath away. I would highlight them or put them in italics, but that would require me to open up another window and go to the story and highlight it and blah blah blah. So I'm going to say this: you have the gift of prose and for that, I am jealous. Truly and honestly jealous.
There are some phrases in here that are so beautifully worded, it kills me. When you described Snape's form as negligible. For some reason, when I read that, I was like, "WHOA. THAT IS THE PERFECT WORD." And then I continued on to the next point where my mind felt like it was ninja'ed or something.
Anyway, to make a review that was supposed to be short a little bit longer, I have no idea what you were talking about. This is hardly awful. If anything, it's amazing, one of the best things you've written. I love how the fire correlates with Lily's hair, ugh, I'm just jealous.
So I'm going to leave you with that, my dear. ILY!
Author's Response: You are so jealous of me. One day you will reach the levels of literacy that I have.
Hahahaha, that's definitely not a false claim, but I'm really glad that you enjoyed this regardless! LOL- and that is also very likely. I think it's a lot easier for people who don't like them as a ship to accept them when it's unrequited/it's just Snape being all woe is me. AND GO AWAY. You are one of my HPFF idols. You are forbidden from being jealous.
I think I just have chemistry on the brain. There is no other explanation for it :P. But it is WONDERFUL that you thought it was perfect, as I am not often hitting upon the right words XD. Hahahahaha, I HOPE that's a good thing.
I am a terrible judge of my own writing. I am extremely biased against myself, haha. But I DO take your reviews with a pinch of salt as you are too nice for words :P. JEALOUSY IS BANNED.
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JANE DEAR :) Here to review even though I am apparently not allowed to read this! Haha.
I LOVED THAT FIRST LINE! Gah. Utter perfection and it pulled me in right from the start. OMG ALSO THIS ONE: "This isnít the first time in his life that he has been alone, but it is the first time that he wishes things were different." Basically, I love you and your words and how you string them together so perfectly! I am envious of your style, you don't even know! :)
OKAY SERIOUSLY I DO NOT KNOW WHY YOU BANNED ME FROM THIS PIECE OF PERFECTION! (I AM CURRENTLY IGNORING THE FLASHING ORANGE OF OUR CONVO AS IT NO DOUBT IS YOU TELLING ME NOT TO READ XD). The whole fire as her hair that progressing him? Awesome fantastic to-die-for brilliance. The green monster swells within! ^_^
Okay well guess what? I am officially in LOVE with this piece! I couldn't tear my eyes away to scroll down and type more comments as I went alone after the first few paragraphs - it was just too engrossing and lovely and perfect. Again, you writing style is brilliant Jane dear. You use words in a seemingly effortless fashion and every sentence feels so fresh. And you have like a thousand symbols/images that make the English student in me squee with happiness.
In conclusion, if you ever ban me from reading any of your work (I'll relent and say this only applies to your recent stuff), I will promptly ignore you. Even if you chuck stuff at me. Because this is just to incredible to miss.
A MILLION/10.Author's Response: YOU WERE SO ULTRA SUPER SNEAKY! Nobody listens to me... :(
Well, I'm glad to see that I managed to draw you in, but you're still a total crazy. You are SO silly! I cannot get such praise from you when you're so amazing. IT JUST DOESN'T WORK THAT WAY. And I have no style to speak of, so that is more silliness :P.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA, I WONDERED WHY YOU DIDN'T REPLY FOR A WHILE. I was shouting lots. I am very pleased that you liked that line, as I've got to say that it's a favourite of mine too ^_^.
Your flattery is FAR too much, but I appreciate it immensely anyway :P. We all like some praise now and then, Lol. Yes, they weren't very well hidden though, were they? XD I just wanted to be a little smidge more technical than I normally am.
Well, in future I shall have to master reverse psychology then, won't I? Hahaha
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