I'm finally here!!
First of, it's not totally relevant, but your graphics are great! They really made me want to read your story, so great job choosing an artist. You actually mispelled his girlfriend's name throughout the story. It's Astoria, but that didn't really take away from the story too much. It's just something that you probably want to fix. I thought it was really sweet, but I was a little disappointed by the use of the song. I thought you kind of copped out by just letting her sing it. The song wasn't really used to propel the story, which is what the challenge intended. I also wish that there had been a little more conflict between Astoria and Draco. I liked the idea behind it, but I felt you would've done better off with "You're A Mean One, Mr. Grinch" with this kind of story. However, I thought that it was sweet that she managed to change Draco's mind. It was definitely a story to spread holiday cheer! I hope you had plenty of your own. Thank you for joining my challenge! I really enjoyed reading your very merry story!Author's Response: Astoria/Asteria. For quite some time, there has been the question of how to spell the youngest Greengrass girl's name. I've seen it both ways and The HP Lexicon and JK Rowling also create some speculation to the "true" spelling. In another story of mine, I spell it with an 'o.' I haven't figure out which one I like better.
I'm glad you enjoyed my graphics. They are courtesy of lilyevanspotter. at TDA. She did a beautiful job and they are absolutely brilliant.
I completely understand where you're coming from in terms of how I used the song. It could have been better served as a precursor to the story or some other way. (I'm not really fond of song-fics so I tend to stray away from writing them.) Looking at the final product, "You're A Mean One, Mr. Grinch" may very well have been a better song choice, but oh well. I do, however, enjoy the simplicity of my usage of the song.
I thank you, though, for your constructive criticism. Isn't that what it's all about anyway? To become a better writer through constructive criticism?
Thanks for the wonderful challenge. It certainly got me in Christmas spirit! :) Report Review
What a lovely little story-it brought tears to my eyes.
Happy New Year!
10/10Author's Response: Aw! Thanks. :)
I'm glad you liked it. Happy New Year to you too!
Thanks so much for the review. :) Report Review
this story is very sweet. will u make a story about Draco and Astoria?^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Aw! What a wonderful way to start the New Year!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Unfortunately I have no idea if I'm going to write a Draco/Asteria story. I have a lot of ideas already rolling around and WIP projects I have to finish, but who knows! This one gives me a good start. :P
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Happy New Year! Report Review
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