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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by mugglemania Coming BackůMaybe

23rd August 2010:
Pretty good story. Fred has always been one of my favorite characters and I like what you did with him.

Author's Response: Thank you. He has been my favorite character since book 1. I'm still torn if I want him to stay or not so I'm haveing a little trouble with the next chapter. There is no need to worry though I will do what is best for the characters. I also see Fred as a sweet but joking around type person so thats why I did what I did. I'm going to start editing the first 9 chapters as I'm working on chapter 10.

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Review #2, by Mrs_Draco_Malfoy123 Coming BackůMaybe

17th July 2010:
Ok so you asked me to review this chapter, sorry it's taken me so long...
I like the plot, but the grammer does need a little help. Like I suggested earlier, maybe read it alloud and just make sure things flow naturally. For example, at the beginning of the story (about 4 paragraphs/lines down) it says... Crystal still feels bad says "I don't think... etc. Maybe something like this "flows" better...
"I don't think I could handle you getting in anymore trouble because of me sis," Crystal says, feeling bad.

By the way, I think you are really improving and should really continue :D Let me know when you get another chapter up! I hope I am helping just a little bit... Good luck! and like I said keep going!!

Author's Response: Its ok. Thank you for your review. I think I'm going to reread all the chapters and do some editing and I will change things around. I am working on chapter 10 right now but I think that I'm going to do some editing on the first 9 chapters. Thanks for the support.

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Review #3, by Mrs_Draco_Malfoy123 Keeping an Eye on Crystal

5th July 2010:
Hi, I left a review earlier and you asked if I could help with editing. I'm really not sure how I would do that but would love to if I could!

-mrs draco malfoy!

Author's Response: I just submited ch 9 but I'm just not sure that I like it so if when it is vallidated and you do read it may you please let me know what you think. Please.

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Review #4, by Mrs_Draco_Malfoy123 Crystal Sneaks Out to See Fred

29th May 2010:
very cute plot! Although i recommend having someone proof read it before you put it up, or maybe read it aloud to yourself before you post it. Other than that it was really good!
Keep going!,
mrs draco malfoy

Author's Response: Thank you. Would you help me with proof reading it? Then I need an opinion on ch.9 before I post it. I'm not sure about it.

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Review #5, by RoseParsons Sticking up for Family

28th February 2010:
Loving story.
Keep it up:)
Rose
xx
8/10

Author's Response: Thank you. I will once I finish the next chapter it will be posted.

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Review #6, by RoseParsons Quidditch and a Wedding

13th February 2010:
i like alot.
update soon
rose.

Author's Response: Thank you. I will keep updating once the chapters are validated.

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